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Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others say it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others say it is better to produce these locally. v. 2
Choosing the appropriate origin of films and television channels to broadcast raises an awareness. Some people are in favor of oversea movies and programmes, the others is keen on national ones. This essay will discuss both views and show that national channels have more benefits for one’s culture. On one hand, foreign movies and TV programmes are advantegeous for many purposes. First of all, it helps us to broaden our mind about other nations. Documentary programmes from other countries not only informs us about the life condition of foreigns but also teach us about how they live and keep their cultural traditions. In this way, we can adopt some helpful ideas to diversify our cultures without losing the essence. Besides, from the differences between cultures, we can also learn how to improve our culture to adapt the modern world. Secondly, those programmes are quite useful sources for studying foreign languages. Consequently, it will be less complicated for us to introduce directly our cultures to international friends. On the other hand, domestic movies and TV programmes benefit the culture in several ways when the media is originated from their country. By broadcasting sounds and images, mass media is a good means to educate young generations about their precious long-term national cultures. If the young has no love with their the traditional customs and no dedication is shown to help protect, their exceptional cultures will face with danger of extinction. In addition, national entertainments are also more suitable for the young to maintain their national values. For examples, in many music shows, the performers dress immodestly can badly affect the lifestyle of young people living in the Eastern countries with the preference of elegance. In conclusion, national channels and films are better ways to keep the charactertistics of one’s culture in comparison with oversea-imported programmes. However, the broadcast station should choose widely the ratio of national to foreign programmes (7 to 3 as an example) in the help of diverse but also distinct cultures.
Choosing the appropriate origin of films and television channels to broadcast raises an awareness.
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people
are in favor of oversea movies and
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programmes
, the others is keen on
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national
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ones
. This essay will discuss both views and
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show
that
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national
channels have more benefits for one’s culture.

On one hand,
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foreign
movies and TV
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programmes
are
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advantegeous
for
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many
purposes.
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First of all
, it
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helps
us to broaden our mind about
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other
nations. Documentary
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programmes
from
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other
countries not
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only
informs us about the life condition of
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foreigns
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but
also
teach us about how they
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live
and
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keep
their cultural traditions. In this way, we can adopt
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some
helpful
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ideas
to diversify our
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cultures
without losing the essence.
Besides
, from the differences between
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cultures
, we can
also
learn how to
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improve
our
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culture
to adapt the modern world.
Secondly
, those
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programmes
are quite useful sources for studying
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foreign
languages.
Consequently
, it will be less complicated for us to introduce
directly
our
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cultures
to international friends.

On the
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other
hand, domestic movies and TV
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programmes
benefit the
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culture
in several ways when the media
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is
originated from their country. By broadcasting sounds and images, mass media is a
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good
means to educate
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young
generations about their precious long-term
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national
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cultures
. If the
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young
has no
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love
with their the traditional customs and no dedication
is shown
to
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help
protect, their exceptional
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cultures
will face with
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danger
of extinction.
In addition
,
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national
entertainments are
also
more suitable for the
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young
to maintain their
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national
values. For examples, in
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many
music
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shows
, the performers dress
immodestly
can
badly
affect the lifestyle of
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young
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people
living in the Eastern countries with the preference of elegance.

In conclusion
,
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national
channels and films are better ways to
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keep
the
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charactertistics
of one’s
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culture
in comparison
with oversea-imported
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programmes
.
However
, the broadcast station should choose
widely
the ratio of
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national
to
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foreign
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programmes
(7 to 3 as an example) in the
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help
of diverse
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but
also
distinct
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cultures
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others say it is better to produce these locally. v. 2

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