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Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages higher level of violence in that society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages higher level of violence in that society. with this opinion? v. 1
People argue that allowing police officers to be armed with guns would increase the rate of criminal violence in society. Personally, I totally disagree with this view. For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to argue that the possession of guns by police forces would lead to higher violence rate. Firstly, in reality, having such weapon would allow police to control criminal situations without using physical violence. As most people are frightened of guns, police can easily force suspects, wrongdoers or robberies to surrender and arrest them. Secondly, guns also deter potential criminals from committing crimes. For example, robberies who intend to rob the bank might think carefully before acting and probably give up if there is the presence of police officers equipped with firearms protecting there. Therefore, this policy would decrease the violence rate rather than increasing it. I am of the opinion that police officers should be entitled to own guns. The principal reason is that nowadays there is a significant increase in gun-related crimes, and it is difficult for police forces with sprays, batons, or electric shock weapons to tackle dangerous situations. This allows criminals to be more powerful, and police officers might be compelled to do what they want. The other reason is that the ownership of guns could not only be useful in legitimate self-defense situations but also help police forces protect the public. For example, when a policeman is threatened by escaping criminals or terrorists, he could shot these criminals so that they will no longer pose serious dangers to the community. In conclusion, I believe that guns possession by the police will not only decrease the number of violent criminals but also contribute to the protection of the public.
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People
argue that allowing
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police
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officers
to
be armed
with
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guns
would increase the rate of
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criminal
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violence
in society.
Personally
, I
totally
disagree with this view.

For a variety of reasons, it would be
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wrong
to argue that the possession of
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guns
by
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police
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forces
would lead to higher
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violence
rate.
Firstly
, in reality, having such weapon would
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allow
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police
to control
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criminal
situations without using physical
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violence
. As most
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people
are frightened
of
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guns
,
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police
can
easily
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force
suspects, wrongdoers or robberies to surrender and arrest them.
Secondly
,
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guns
also
deter potential
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criminals
from committing crimes.
For example
, robberies who intend to rob the bank might
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think
carefully
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before
acting and
probably
give up if there is the presence of
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police
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officers
equipped with firearms protecting there.
Therefore
, this policy would decrease the
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violence
rate
rather
than increasing it.

I am of the opinion that
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police
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officers
should
be entitled
to
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own
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guns
. The principal reason is that nowadays there is a significant increase in gun-related crimes, and it is difficult for
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police
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forces
with sprays, batons, or electric shock weapons to tackle
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dangerous
situations. This
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allows
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criminals
to be more powerful, and
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police
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officers
might
be compelled
to do what they want. The other reason is that the ownership of
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guns
could not
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only
be useful in legitimate self-defense situations
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but
also
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help
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police
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forces
protect the public.
For example
, when a policeman
is threatened
by escaping
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criminals
or terrorists, he could
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shot
these
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criminals
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so
that they will no longer pose serious
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dangers
to the community.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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guns
possession by the
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police
will not
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only
decrease the number of violent
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criminals
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but
also
contribute to the protection of the public.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages higher level of violence in that society. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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