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Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. v. 2
IT IS ARGUED BY SOME THAT THE CIRCULATION OF OVERSEES FILMS AND TV SHOWS IS BETTER FOR A NATION THAN LOCAL MANUFACTURING, DUE TO ITS VAST EDUCATIONAL GUIDELINES WHICH SERVES AS AN EYE OPENER FOR MANY LEADING THEM IN THE PROPER PATH PROFESSIONALLY. ON ONE HAND, OWING TO THE FACT THAT MANY UNDER DEVELOPED COUNTRIES HAVE NO IDEA OF WHAT IS GOING ON AROUND THEM, I AM OF THE OPINION THAT PATRONISING FOREIGN MOVIE INDUSTRY WOULD BE OF OPTIMUM HELP TO ENLIGTHEN AND EMPOWER THE PEOPLE IN THEIR JOURNEY TO MAKE WHOLESOME CHOICES. THEREBY, CREATING HOPE FOR A BETTER FUTURE. THERE IS A THING CALLED CONSTRUCTIVE DOCUSERIES WHICH INCLUDES POSSIBLE CAREER PATHS PEOPLE SHOULD FOLLOW TO ATTAIN THEIR FULL POTENTIALS. IT DIFFERS FROM ONE SECTOR TO ANOTHER, AND IS TAUGHT BY EXPERTS IN THEIR RESPECTIVE FIELDS. IT INVOLVES THEM TELLING THEIR STORIES AND POSSIBLE MISTAKES HUMANS MAKE CHOOSING A COURSE. ONE PARTICULARLY GOOD EXAMPLE IS THE CASE OF DOCTOR CHEUNG, WHO STARTED OFF AS A NURSE IN AN ENORMOUS FACILITY, HE WAS ALWAYS INVOLVED IN MAJOR SURGERIES PASSING APPARATUS TO THE SURGEON AS A SRUB NURSE, DURING PROCEDURES HE FOUND HIMSELF HELPING THE DOCTORS MAKE GOOD CRUCIAL CHOICES AND WITH TIME HIS COLLEAGUES STARTED BECKONING TO HIM FOR PROFESSIONAL ASSISTANCE. HOWEVER, HE DECIDED TO GO TO MEDICAL SCHOOL AND ACED HIS WAY THROUGH IT, PRESENTLY DR CHEUNG ADVICES YOUNG ONES NOT TO WASTE THEIR TIME LIKE HE DID, BY TEACHING THEM THE SIGNS TO NOTE FOR, ESPECIALLY WHEN THE PASSION IS EVIDENT. ON THE OTHER HAND, DOMESTICALLY MADE MOVIES PROMOTES THE UNIQUENESS OF A PLACE, DUE TO THE FACT THAT EVERY CULTURE HAS ITS BELIEFS WHICH DIFFERS. IN MOST PLACES THERE IS A FEAR OF THEIR VALUES GOING EXTINCT, SO THE WAY TO KEEP THEIR WAY OF LIFE RELEVANT IS BY ADVOCATING THE DISTRIBUTION OF THEIR PRODUCTIONS. VIDEOS TEACHES THE YOUNGER GENERATION THE IMPORTANCE OF THE THEIR FESTIVALS, MUSICS, FOOD, AND DRESSING. MOST IMPORTANTLY, THE AFFOREMENTIONED GOODS ARE AFFORDABLE AND MORE EASILY ACCESIBLE BY EVERYONE, MEETING PEOPLES NEEDS WITHOUT THE FINANCIAL STRESS OF PAYING IMPORTATAION TAXES AND SHIPPING FEES. TO CONCLUDE, WHILST SOME SUPPORT THE IMPORTATION OF FOREIGN COMMODITIES, OTHERS PREFER THE USE OF LOCALLY MADE ONES DUE TO THE FACT THAT IT PRESERVES THEIR SOCIETY IN MANY WAYS AND IT'S ECONOMICAL GAINS CAN NEVER BE OVER EMPHASIZED.
IT
IS ARGUED
BY
SOME
THAT THE CIRCULATION OF OVERSEES FILMS AND TV
SHOWS
IS BETTER FOR A NATION THAN LOCAL MANUFACTURING, DUE TO ITS VAST EDUCATIONAL GUIDELINES WHICH SERVES AS AN EYE OPENER FOR
MANY
LEADING THEM IN THE PROPER PATH
PROFESSIONALLY
.

ON ONE HAND, OWING TO THE FACT THAT
MANY
UNDER
DEVELOPED COUNTRIES
HAVE NO
IDEA
OF WHAT IS GOING ON AROUND THEM, I AM OF THE OPINION THAT
PATRONISING
FOREIGN MOVIE INDUSTRY WOULD BE OF OPTIMUM
HELP
TO
ENLIGTHEN
AND EMPOWER THE
PEOPLE
IN THEIR JOURNEY TO
MAKE
WHOLESOME CHOICES. THEREBY, CREATING HOPE FOR A BETTER FUTURE. THERE IS A THING CALLED CONSTRUCTIVE
DOCUSERIES
WHICH INCLUDES POSSIBLE CAREER PATHS
PEOPLE
SHOULD FOLLOW TO ATTAIN THEIR FULL POTENTIALS. IT DIFFERS FROM ONE SECTOR TO ANOTHER, AND
IS TAUGHT
BY EXPERTS IN THEIR RESPECTIVE FIELDS. IT INVOLVES THEM TELLING THEIR STORIES AND POSSIBLE MISTAKES HUMANS
MAKE
CHOOSING A COURSE. ONE
PARTICULARLY
GOOD
EXAMPLE IS THE CASE OF DOCTOR
CHEUNG
, WHO
STARTED
OFF AS A NURSE IN AN ENORMOUS FACILITY, HE WAS ALWAYS INVOLVED IN MAJOR SURGERIES PASSING APPARATUS TO THE SURGEON AS A
SRUB
NURSE, DURING PROCEDURES HE FOUND HIMSELF HELPING THE DOCTORS
MAKE
GOOD
CRUCIAL CHOICES AND WITH TIME HIS COLLEAGUES
STARTED
BECKONING TO HIM FOR PROFESSIONAL ASSISTANCE.
HOWEVER
, HE DECIDED TO GO TO MEDICAL SCHOOL AND ACED HIS WAY THROUGH IT,
PRESENTLY
DR
CHEUNG
ADVICES YOUNG
ONES
NOT TO WASTE THEIR TIME LIKE HE DID, BY TEACHING THEM THE SIGNS TO NOTE FOR,
ESPECIALLY
WHEN THE PASSION IS EVIDENT.

ON THE OTHER HAND
,
DOMESTICALLY
MADE MOVIES PROMOTES THE UNIQUENESS OF A PLACE, DUE TO THE FACT THAT EVERY CULTURE HAS ITS BELIEFS WHICH DIFFERS. IN MOST PLACES THERE IS A FEAR OF THEIR VALUES GOING EXTINCT,
SO
THE WAY TO
KEEP
THEIR WAY OF LIFE RELEVANT IS BY ADVOCATING THE DISTRIBUTION OF THEIR PRODUCTIONS.
VIDEOS TEACHES
THE YOUNGER GENERATION THE IMPORTANCE OF
THE THEIR FESTIVALS
, MUSICS, FOOD, AND DRESSING. MOST
IMPORTANTLY
, THE
AFFOREMENTIONED
GOODS
ARE AFFORDABLE AND MORE
EASILY
ACCESIBLE
BY EVERYONE, MEETING PEOPLES NEEDS WITHOUT THE FINANCIAL
STRESS
OF PAYING
IMPORTATAION
TAXES AND SHIPPING FEES.

TO CONCLUDE
, WHILST
SOME
SUPPORT THE IMPORTATION OF FOREIGN COMMODITIES, OTHERS PREFER THE
USE
OF
LOCALLY
MADE
ONES
DUE TO THE FACT THAT IT PRESERVES THEIR SOCIETY IN
MANY
WAYS AND
IT'S ECONOMICAL GAINS
CAN NEVER BE OVER EMPHASIZED.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
388 words
6.5
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