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Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. To what extent do you agree. v.2

Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. v. 2
Although it is sometimes thought that environmental issues should be handled globally, other people believe that it ought to be dealt nation wise. In my opinion, tackling environmental issues either globally or nationally is depends upon severity of a problem. On the one hand, discussing environmental problems on a global scale helps to get more ideas and solutions to overcome problems, according to some. For example, United Nation keeps discussing with many countries on devastating environmental issues such as Global warming, preventing Ozone layer, which helps them to get more accurate solutions to overcome such problems. Such kind of discussions, furthermore, helps to spread message across the world to tackle and overcome destructing environmental problems as media over the world keep close eyes on these discussions. Discussing such kind of issues on a global level helps to share science and technologies to handle environmental problems. For instance, many developed countries have excellent tools to get advance information regarding Tsunami which can be shared among the non developed countries to help them to handle such major problems. On the other hand, it is often thought that environmental problems ought to deal nationally as it helps to get a quick and accurate solution. Issues such as Air pollution, water pollution should discuss nation wise because each nation can analyse these issues better and troubleshoot them accurately. Discussing and handling these issues nationally helps them to be self reliant and motivates them for new inventions. Finally, in my view, both methods are important to handle environmental issues, but tackling these issues nationally or on a global scale is true depends on destructive level of the issue. Discussing highly destructive issues on a global level helps to get different ideas and accurate answer to overcome these issues, whereas handling less harmful environmental problems nationally helps to get fast solution and nations apply themselves to new inventions. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe it would be better to handle more dangerous issues on a global scale and small issues nationally.
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environmental
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people
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nation
wise. In my opinion, tackling
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environmental
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issues
either globally or
nationally
is depends upon severity of a problem.

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discussing
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environmental
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problems
on a
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global
scale
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helps
to
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get
more
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ideas
and
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solutions
to overcome
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problems
, according to
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some
.
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, United
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Nation
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keeps
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discussing
with
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many
countries on devastating
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environmental
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issues
such as
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Global
warming, preventing Ozone layer, which
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helps
them to
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get
more accurate
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solutions
to overcome such
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problems
. Such kind of discussions,
furthermore
,
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helps
to spread message across the world to tackle and overcome destructing
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environmental
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problems
as media over the world
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keep
close eyes on these discussions.
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such kind of
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issues
on a
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global
level
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helps
to share science and technologies to
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handle
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environmental
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problems
.
For instance
,
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many
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developed countries
have excellent tools to
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get
advance information regarding Tsunami which can
be shared
among the non
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developed countries
to
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help
them to
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handle
such major problems.

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, it is
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often
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thought
that
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environmental
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problems
ought to deal
nationally
as it
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helps
to
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a quick and accurate
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solution
.
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Issues
such as Air pollution, water pollution should discuss
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nation
wise
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each
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nation
can
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analyse
these
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issues
better and troubleshoot them
accurately
.
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Discussing
and handling these
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issues
nationally
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helps
them to be
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self reliant
and motivates them for new inventions.

Finally
, in my view, both methods are
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important
to
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handle
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environmental
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issues
,
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tackling these
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issues
nationally
or on a
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global
scale is true depends on destructive level of the
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issue
.
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highly
destructive
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, whereas handling less harmful
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environmental
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problems
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helps
to
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get
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fast
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solution
and
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nations
apply themselves to new inventions.

In conclusion
, despite
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people
having
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different
views, I believe it would be better to
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handle
more
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dangerous
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issues
on a
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global
scale and
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small
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.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
338 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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