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Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear uniform at work. To what extent so you agree or disagree. v.2

Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear uniform at work. v. 2
Some people reason that the decision for all staff to wear the same colour and pattern of cloth to work is a welcomed idea. If those working in a firm put on a uniform attire, they can be easily identify and the rate at which fraudsters deceived customers will reduce. Employees, people who are employed to work in a firm, should wear a uniform attire to distinguished them from non staff. Since this similar colour and design of cloth, are only wore by staff, customers will know the right person to approach and discuss about items for purchase. Although l went to a bookshop, l couldn' t decision on the particular novel to buy. A young man, who was handsome and tall, walked up to me and he asked about the type of books l wanted. Despite he was well groomed, l refused to continued discussing with him because his attire was different from that of other staff in the bookshop, Well, l was later informed that he works in the shop. Therefore, uniform wore by workers help customers to easily identify them. Furthermore, uniform outfit wore by employees will cut down on the rate at which customers are deceived by fraudsters. Customers will only approach individuals who wore a firm' s uniform for details and payments on an item to be purchase. Therefore, buyers will not pay money to a non staff in a company. The Nigerian police reported about an incidence that occurred in a Supermarket where staffs wear any type of clothing to work. A woman wanted to buy an electronic device from this supearker. Since the workers are difficult to identify, she asked a guy directly by her about the item After much persuasion by him, she bought the device. Unfortunately, she paid directly into the man' s account because she felt he was a staff in the supermarket. The security personnel refused her from leaving the premises with the device since she couldn' t provide a receipt to prove she had paid for the item. He played a fast one on her. If members of an organisation wear uniform to work, their patronisers can distinguish them from others and they will rarely make pay for a purchased item to a non staff.
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Some
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people
reason that the decision for all
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staff
to
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wear
the same
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colour
and pattern of cloth to
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work
is a welcomed
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idea
. If those working in a firm put on a
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uniform
attire, they can be
easily
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identify
and the rate at which fraudsters deceived
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customers
will
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reduce
.

Employees,
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people
who
are employed
to
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work
in a firm, should
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wear
a
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uniform
attire to distinguished them from non
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staff
. Since this similar
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colour
and design of cloth, are
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only
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wore
by
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staff
,
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customers
will know the right person to approach and discuss about
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items
for
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purchase
. Although l went to a bookshop, l
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couldn&
#039; t decision on the particular novel to
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buy
. A young
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man
, who was handsome and tall, walked up to
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me and
he asked about the type of books l wanted. Despite he was well groomed, l refused to continued discussing with him
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because
his attire was
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different
from that of other
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staff
in the bookshop, Well, l was later informed that he works in the shop.
Therefore
,
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uniform
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wore
by workers
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help
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customers
to
easily
identify them.

Furthermore
,
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uniform
outfit
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wore
by employees will
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cut
down on the rate at which
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customers
are deceived
by fraudsters.
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Customers
will
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only
approach individuals who
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wore
a
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firm&
#039; s
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uniform
for
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details
and payments on an
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item
to be
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purchase
.
Therefore
, buyers will not pay money to a non
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staff
in a
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company
. The Nigerian police reported about an incidence that occurred in a Supermarket where
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staffs
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wear
any type of clothing to
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work
. A woman wanted to
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buy
an electronic device from this
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supearker
. Since the workers are difficult to identify, she asked a guy
directly
by her about the
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item


After much persuasion by him, she
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bought
the device. Unfortunately, she paid
directly
into the
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man&
#039; s account
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because
she felt he was a
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staff
in the supermarket. The security personnel refused her from leaving the premises with the device since she
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couldn&
#039; t provide a receipt to prove she had paid for the
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item
. He played a
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fast
one on her.

If members of an
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organisation
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wear
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uniform
to
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work
, their
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patronisers
can distinguish them from
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others and
they will rarely
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make
pay for a
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purchased
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item
to a non
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staff
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear uniform at work. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
377 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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