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Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear a uniform at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear a uniform at work. v. 1
Uniforms can be identified as one of the most vital requirements of an employee in certain job roles. Some people are considering that all workers should wear a uniform at work. From my perspective, I strongly agree with this statement due to many reasons, following essay will discuss this in detail. Firstly, a certain dress code is segregating an individual from the other general community, such as police personnel, military armed forces and health care assistants. For instance, the public can easily reach a person from a security forces, even among a humongous crowd because of their attire when they need help, hence this is a kind of sign for people to identify them easily. Secondly, some job roles require specific attires for people to perform their tasks properly. For example, fire brigade professionals need their special set of clothing to wear always when they are on duty. It helps them to act faster and provides them the safety they need while they are at a job. Same way, this is a necessity for most of the careers such as safety helmet is vital for engineers while they are at construction sites. Furthermore, special attires sometimes act as a sign for specific situations. For example, airport ground workers who are wearing colourful fluorescent jackets provide special signals to air pilots when the ground is clear. In addition, these special uniforms will reflect a bright light during the night time, so anyone can see them clearly from wherever they are. In conclusion, most of the professionals need a some kind of a dress code due to safety measures, identification purposes or to perform duties well. Therefore, I strongly agree that everyone should wear a suitable outfit for their jobs.
Uniforms can
be identified
as one of the most vital requirements of an employee in certain
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job
roles.
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Some
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people
are considering that all workers should wear a uniform at work. From my perspective, I
strongly
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agree
with this statement due to
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many
reasons, following essay will discuss this in detail.

Firstly
, a certain dress code is segregating an individual from the other general community, such as police personnel, military armed forces and health care assistants.
For instance
, the public can
easily
reach a person from a security forces, even among a humongous crowd
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because
of their attire when they
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need
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help
,
hence
this is a kind of
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sign
for
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people
to identify them
easily
.
Secondly
,
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some
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job
roles require specific attires for
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people
to perform their tasks
properly
.
For example
, fire brigade professionals
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need
their
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special
set of clothing to
The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'wear'.
wear always
when they are on duty. It
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helps
them to act faster and provides them the safety they
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need
while they are at a
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job
. Same way, this is a necessity for most of the careers such as safety helmet is vital for engineers while they are at construction sites.

Furthermore
,
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special
attires
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sometimes
act as a
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sign
for specific situations.
For example
, airport ground workers who are wearing
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colourful
fluorescent jackets provide
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special
signals to air pilots when the ground is
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clear
.
In addition
, these
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special
uniforms will reflect a bright light during the
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night time
,
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so
anyone can
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see
them
clearly
from wherever they are.

In conclusion
, most of the professionals
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need
a
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some
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kind of a
dress code due to safety measures, identification purposes or to perform duties well.
Therefore
, I
strongly
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agree
that everyone should wear a suitable outfit for their
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jobs
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear a uniform at work. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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