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Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. with this opinion? v. 2
It is a controversial issue as to whether a greater amount of time and money should be spent in saving lives of forest's fauna, or, whether human population could have become the main priority in helping by money and time. Personally, I believe that saving environs have become essential for protecting humanity, so wild creatures ought to save first. To begin with, a wide range of wild animals is going extinct due to the widespread devastation caused by human beings. For that reason, it should be saved for balancing eco-system; otherwise, the imbalance creates myriads of dire consequences such as lack of chemicals affect the production of medicine, and the extinction of one animal may unable to supply food for other creatures result in the loss of precious wild animals. Besides, if the animals of the forest are extinct, people will not get food for their sustenance. Thus, money and time should be given to saving wild animals. Similarly, people think that they spend lots of money on the wild creature; however, I think that the whole world, including myself, believe that they spend time in discussions such as making seminars, creating awareness among people instead of protecting wild animals. In contrast, the expenditure should go to save animals as if they are our pivotal part of our life. What is more, the wild animal protection depends on the charities which come from different organizations. That is why volunteers should spend time on correct institutions to protect the life of wild animals who save human beings. In conclusion, money and time have to be spent on the human population, which I believe unimportant, while if the revenue from governments and public authorities and the valuable time of volunteers can expense on sheltering animals of wildlife, the human population could be saved, automatically, because people destroy wildlife.
It is a controversial issue
as to whether
a greater amount of
time
and
money
should
be spent
in saving
lives
of forest's fauna, or, whether
human
population could have become the main priority in helping by
money
and
time
.
Personally
, I believe that saving environs have become essential for protecting humanity,
so
wild creatures ought to save
first
.

To
begin
with, a wide range of wild
animals
is going extinct due to the widespread devastation caused by
human
beings. For that reason, it should
be saved
for balancing
eco-system
;
otherwise
, the imbalance creates myriads of dire consequences such as lack of chemicals affect the production of medicine, and the extinction of one
animal
may unable
to supply food for other creatures result in the loss of precious wild
animals
.
Besides
, if the
animals
of the forest are extinct,
people
will not
get
food for their sustenance.
Thus
,
money
and
time
should be
given
to saving wild animals.

Similarly
,
people
think
that they spend lots of
money
on the wild creature;
however
, I
think
that the whole world, including myself, believe that they spend
time
in discussions such as making seminars, creating awareness among
people
instead
of protecting wild
animals
.
In contrast
, the expenditure should go to save
animals
as if they are our pivotal part of our life.
What is more
, the wild
animal
protection depends on the charities which
come
from
different
organizations.
That is
why volunteers should spend
time
on correct institutions to protect the life of wild
animals
who save
human
beings.

In conclusion
,
money
and
time
have to
be spent
on the
human
population, which I believe unimportant, while if the revenue from
governments
and public authorities and the valuable
time
of volunteers can expense on sheltering
animals
of wildlife, the
human
population could
be saved
,
automatically
,
because
people
destroy
wildlife.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
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306 words
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