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Some people think that international travel makes them prejudiced rather than broad-minded. Give reasons why people fail to benefit from travel and how to improve the understanding ofcountries you visit. v.1

Some people think that international travel makes them prejudiced rather than broad-minded. Give reasons why people fail to benefit from travel and how to improve the understanding ofcountries you visit. v. 1
A leader is a person who leads by example and gets the job done. While intelligent is an important virtue for a person to lead, there are other many equally omnipotent traits he must possess. In this essay I will elaborate my view with the help of examples. To begin with, a leader must be able to motivate his juniors. This is because a motivated staff is a good breeding ground of innovative ideas. For example, few encouraging words from a boss can help relieve employee from stress and meet his deadline. As a result, the organisation prospers, which augurs well for everyone concerned. If a superior fails to motivate his juniors, it will result in low work efficiency. Moreover, the person in command should keep the lines of communication open between him and his team. This is very important because it encourages staff to come up with and discuss their problems at workplace openly and frankly with him. For instance, I was on the verge of resigning from my job due to a problem with a co-worker, but when I discussed the matter with my boss, the whole matter was resolved amicably. This not only gave me immense job satisfaction, but also helped foster good relationship with my co-worker later on. In conclusion, I would reiterate my opinion that a leader should possess range of personality traits such as honesty, leading by example, problem-resolving skills, credibility etc. to lead his team effectively.
A leader is a person who leads by example and
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gets
the job done. While intelligent is an
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important
virtue for a person to lead, there are other
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many
equally
omnipotent traits he
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must
possess. In this essay I will elaborate my view with the
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help
of examples.

To
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begin
with, a leader
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must
be able to motivate his juniors. This is
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because
a motivated staff is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
breeding ground of innovative
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ideas
.
For example
, few encouraging words from a boss can
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help
relieve employee from
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stress
and
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meet
his deadline.
As a result
, the
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organisation
prospers, which augurs well for everyone concerned. If a superior fails to motivate his juniors, it will result in low work efficiency.

Moreover
, the person in command should
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keep
the lines of communication open between him and his team. This is
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very
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important
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because
it encourages staff to
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come
up with and discuss their problems at workplace
openly
and
frankly
with him.
For instance
, I was on the verge of resigning from my job due to a problem with a co-worker,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
when I discussed the matter with my boss, the whole matter
was resolved
amicably
. This not
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only
gave me immense job satisfaction,
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but
also
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helped
foster
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good
relationship with my co-worker later on.

In conclusion
, I would reiterate my opinion that a leader should possess range of personality traits such as honesty, leading by example, problem-resolving
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skills
, credibility etc. to lead his team
effectively
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Some people think that international travel makes them prejudiced rather than broad-minded. Give reasons why people fail to benefit from travel and how to improve the understanding ofcountries you visit. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
243 words
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7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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