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International travel can make people prejudiced rather than broad minded. Why people fail to benefit when they travel? What we can do to improve their understanding of the countries they visit? v.1

International travel can make people prejudiced rather than broad minded. Why people fail to benefit when they travel? What we can do to improve their understanding of the countries they visit? v. 1
It is true that rather than having numbers of exotic cuisine and cultures, some tourists fail to benefit when they travel. The reasons for this problem are varied and there are some measures that should be taken into consideration to heighten visitors’ understanding of the host countries. There are two main explanations for this issue. Fristly, the travel expenses in some famous tourist destinations, Ha Long Bay in Vietnam for example, might be grossly inflated. As a matter of fact, some travelers may be overcharged for anything from a taxi, a meal from a restaurant to buying a souvenir, which makes visitors hold negative attitude towards the host nation. Secondly, the problem of wate disposal, pollution and the unregulated construction of hotels in many tourist attractions also discourage tourists from exploring the richness of far-flung destinations. For example, many beach resorts in Thailand have become cocrete jungles of high-rise hotels and apartments, preventing travelers from enjoying the beautiful landscape. There are several effective approaches to improve the visitors’ understanding of the host nation. Travelers should access a huge storage of information through online platform to broaden their knowledge about the countries they visit. By having a thorought insight into tourist destinations, visitors will be better prepared to avoid situations which they may be overcharged, enabling them to enjoy the richness of the host nation ‘s customs and practices. Additonally, governments should enforce strict regulations on the tourism industry, ensuring that the amount of rubbish released into the environment and the construction of hotels are regulated. By doing this, visitors will be motivated to explore the rich historical heritage of tourist destinations, heightening their understanding of the countries In conclusion, although there are several reasons why some tourists become prejudiced rather than broad- minded when they visit other nations, some effective measures should be taken into account to tackle this problem
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some
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tourists
fail to benefit when they travel. The reasons for this problem
are varied
and there are
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some
measures that should
be taken
into consideration to heighten
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visitors’
understanding of the
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host
countries.

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, the travel expenses in
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some
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famous
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destinations
, Ha Long Bay in Vietnam
for example
, might be
grossly
inflated. As a matter of fact,
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some
travelers may
be overcharged
for anything from a taxi, a meal from a restaurant to buying a souvenir, which
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makes
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visitors
hold
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negative
attitude towards the
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host
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.
Secondly
, the problem of
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wate
disposal, pollution and the unregulated construction of hotels in
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attractions
also
discourage
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tourists
from exploring the richness of far-flung
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destinations
.
For example
,
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many
beach resorts in Thailand have become
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cocrete
jungles of high-rise hotels and apartments, preventing travelers from enjoying the
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beautiful
landscape.

There are several effective approaches to
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improve
the
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visitors’
understanding of the
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nation
. Travelers should access a huge storage of information through online platform to broaden their knowledge about the countries they visit. By having a
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thorought
insight into
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tourist
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destinations
,
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visitors
will be better prepared to avoid situations which they may
be overcharged
, enabling them to enjoy the richness of the
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host
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nation
‘s customs and practices.
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Additonally
,
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governments
should enforce strict regulations on the tourism industry, ensuring that the amount of rubbish released into the environment and the construction of hotels
are regulated
. By doing this,
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visitors
will
be motivated
to explore the rich historical heritage of
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tourist
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destinations
, heightening their understanding of the
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countries


In conclusion
, although there are several reasons why
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some
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tourists
become prejudiced
rather
than broad- minded when they visit other
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nations
,
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some
effective measures should
be taken
into account to tackle this problem
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IELTS essay International travel can make people prejudiced rather than broad minded. Why people fail to benefit when they travel? What we can do to improve their understanding of the countries they visit? v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
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