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Some people think that intelligence is innate while others argue that it can be improved through learning discuss both the views and give your opinion? v.1

Some people think that intelligence is innate while others argue that it can be improved through learning v. 1
While some people opine that intelligence is inherited, others insist that it can be acquired through learning. In my opinion, intelligence is both innate and acquired. There are certainly some innate aspects of intelligence. That explains why children taught in the same class acquire different grades. Another interesting aspect of intelligence is that people have different skills or aptitude. For instance, some people have a natural flair for writing, singing or drawing. They can excel in these areas, even if they do not receive formal training. Some students can solve arithmetic sums more easily and there are also children who have a natural aptitude for science. What’s more, although a number of people study science or arts, only a handful of them emerge as successful scientists or artists. Obviously, they have certain skills that others do not possess and that probably explains why intelligence is innate. On the flip side, there are certainly some aspects of intelligence that can and should be acquired and developed. For example, just because someone is born ‘intelligent’ there is no guarantee that they will achieve great things in life. In almost all cases, they need training and practice. If intelligence was truly an innate quality, there would be no need for this training. There are also examples of many people who became a great success in their life in spite of getting poor grades in school. Their intelligence certainly is not ‘innate’. Rather, it is something they acquired through learning and practice. To conclude, it is not hard to see that intelligence is both innate and acquired. All of us are born with certain levels of intelligence. If an intelligent person is born in a conducive environment and receive adequate levels of external stimuli they can produce outstanding results. At the same time, someone born with only average levels of intelligence can also achieve great things through learning and hard work.
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people
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skills
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have a natural flair for writing, singing or drawing. They can excel in these areas, even if they do not receive formal training.
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students can solve arithmetic sums more
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acquired
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quality, there would be no need for this training. There are
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is not
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‘innate’
.
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acquired
through learning and practice.

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, it is not
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that
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intelligence
is both
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innate
and
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acquired
. All of us
are born
with certain levels of
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intelligence
. If an intelligent person
is born
in a conducive environment and receive adequate levels of external stimuli they can produce outstanding results. At the same time, someone born with
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only
average levels of
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can
also
achieve great things through learning and
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hard
work.
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IELTS essay Some people think that intelligence is innate while others argue that it can be improved through learning v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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