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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.9

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 9
In the developing new technological world pollution are most affected factor to preventing a climate change. Also, damage of environment to prevent modulation in climate. Generally mankind are thinking to change those life with the environment is to safe for it’s. If asked to support, I would choose partially agree with this sentence also my opinion is elaborated further. Modern cities the weather are very bad condition at that time, because of the human are main factor of the change environment. Moreover, green house effect is very harmful to our environment and that is polluted by people. For instance, a farmer is growing the vegetables on his farm but they would grow up the non- seasonal vegetable using the green house. So, that the important to damage the over environmental cycle. In contras, people has to knowledge of the how they can stop this effect and also get a less pollution. Another side, some has think of the batter option is human are manage to live in all type of the environmental condition. Furthermore, in some case, climate is very unknowing situation that might we can manage it, that time the we can settle with climate situation. For example, in ruler areas people will know about the all kind of safety and protection of the those development; consequently the government will provide a this type of knowledge of it’s population. Thus, the society have defense to the any type of the weather condition. To conclude, general public can cover both of the situation handle in any of the climate change. In my opinion they have to focus on the less damage of environment and also the learn about how to survive in the difficult weather condition.
In the developing new technological world pollution are most
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affected
factor to preventing a
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climate
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change
.
Also
,
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damage of
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environment
to
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prevent
modulation in
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climate
.
Generally
mankind are thinking to
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change
Did you mean "this life" or "those lives"?
those life
with the
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environment
is
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to
safe for it’s. If asked to support, I would choose
partially
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agree
with this sentence
also
my opinion
is elaborated
further
.

Modern cities the weather are
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very
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bad
condition at that time,
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because
of the human are main factor of the
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change
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environment
.
Moreover
, green
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house
effect is
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very
harmful to our
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environment
and that
is polluted
by
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people
.
For instance
, a farmer is growing the vegetables on his farm
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but
they would grow up the non- seasonal vegetable using the green
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house
.
“So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So, that
the
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important
to damage the over environmental cycle. In
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contras
,
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
has
to knowledge of
Did you mean "how"?
the how
they can
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stop
this effect and
also
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get
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "less pollution".
a less pollution
.

Another side,
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some
has
Use past participle here: "thought".
think
of the batter option is human are manage to
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live
in all type of the environmental condition.
Furthermore
, in
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some
case,
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climate
is
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very
unknowing situation that might we can manage it, that time
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the we
can settle with
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climate
situation.
For example
, in ruler areas
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people
will know about the all kind of safety and protection of the
Did you mean "this development" or "those developments"?
those development
;
consequently
the
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government
will provide
Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only "a" or "this" is left.
a this
type of knowledge
Did you mean "of its population"?
of it’s population
.
Thus
, the society have defense to the any type of the weather condition.

To conclude
,
Consider using "public".
general public
can cover both of the situation handle in any of the
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climate
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change
. In my opinion they
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have to
focus on the less
The usual collocation for word "damage" is "to" not "of." Revise: "damage to".
damage of
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environment
and
also
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'learn' is correct. If 'learn' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the learn
about how to survive in the difficult weather condition.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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