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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Our earth has experienced a drastic climate change compared to the past. In fact, I agree with those who feel that they should find other ways to deal with climate change. Firstly, people must reduce the usage of electricity. As it has chemicals that are harmful to the environment and can be one of the ways that involve in climate changes. To illustrate, people can minimalize the usage of air condition as it contains hazardous chemicals like CFC that can affect the climate changes in the environment. Although the majority of people in big cities need air condition in every places, we can reduce its usage by shutting down the air condition while it is not used. Thus, the importance of saving energy is very useful to hinder the climate changes become higher. Secondly, the majority of people should self-conscious and obey the regulations that have been made by the government. Each of us should realize that all disasters and climate changes are happening because of our own attitude towards our environment. Flood, for instance, it is commonly caused by the various rubbish that have been thrown with no responsible to the lake. Therefore, these rubbish might stuck in the sewer and caused heavy flood that prejudice everybody. Furthermore, some knowledge about the effect of climate change may change people's perspective in climate change. In conclusion, reducing extreme climate change in our area can be done by saving energy and be self-conscious. I, therefore, remain firmly convinced that explore some other ways to deal with climate change is a wisest decision.
Our earth has experienced a drastic
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climate
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change
compared to the past. In fact, I
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agree
with those who feel that they should find other ways to deal with
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climate
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change
.

Firstly
,
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people
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must
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reduce
the usage of electricity. As it has chemicals that are harmful to the environment and can be one of the ways that involve in
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climate
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changes
. To illustrate,
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people
can
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minimalize
the usage of air condition as it contains hazardous chemicals like CFC that can affect the
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climate
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changes
in the environment. Although the majority of
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people
in
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big
cities need air condition in every
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places
, we can
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reduce
its usage by shutting down the air condition while it is not
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used
.
Thus
, the importance of saving energy is
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very
useful to hinder the
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climate
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changes
become higher.

Secondly
, the majority of
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people
should self-conscious and obey the regulations that have
been made
by the
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government
. Each of us should realize that all disasters and
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climate
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changes
are happening
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because
of our
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own
attitude towards our environment. Flood,
for instance
, it is
commonly
caused by the various rubbish that have
been thrown
with no responsible to the lake.
Therefore
, these rubbish might
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stuck
in the sewer and caused heavy flood that prejudice everybody.
Furthermore
,
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some
knowledge about the effect of
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climate
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change
may
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change
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people
's perspective in
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climate
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change
.

In conclusion
, reducing extreme
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climate
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change
in our area can
be done
by saving energy and be self-conscious. I,
therefore
, remain
firmly
convinced that explore
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some
other ways to deal with
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climate
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change
is
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a
wisest decision.
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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