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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 2
In the past twenty years, climate change is becoming one of the biggest issues on a global scale. Although a huge number of people are concerned about this issue, some people claim that we should try to live with it instead of preventing it. To my mind, I totally disagree with this opinion. The first reason is that people cannot always change their lifestyle to fit with the mother nature's changes. Indeed, human is intelligent and they can construct buildings sustain with extreme conditions like earthquake and hurricane. However, there will be a certain time in the future people cannot find a solution to deal with climate change. Therefore, trying to live with climate change is just a temporary solution. Another reason is that preventing climate change is not only for the present but only for the future. Recent research has shown that there will be no human living on the Earth within 100 years because of natural disasters. In fact, there is already fewer places for human to live than before due to the rising of sea level caused by climate change. If people just only find a way to live with climate change, the end of the human era will occur in the very near future and it is so selfish if contemporary people just think for themselves than for the future of their children. Changing a way of living to comfort with climate change definitely cannot prevent it, but only cause the sooner human extinction. In conclusion, I believe that addressing with climate change instead of avoiding it is necessary to protect the environment as well as the Earth.
In the past twenty years,
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people
are concerned
about this issue,
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claim that we should try to
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first
reason is that
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cannot always
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their lifestyle to fit with the mother nature's
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intelligent and
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However
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future
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people
cannot find a solution to deal with
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.
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a temporary solution.

Another reason is that preventing
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is not
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for the present
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for the
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. Recent research has shown that there will be no
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living on the Earth within 100 years
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of natural disasters. In fact, there is already fewer places for
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to
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than
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before
due to the rising of sea level caused by
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. If
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find a way to
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era will occur in the
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near
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and it is
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selfish if contemporary
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people
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for themselves than for the
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of their children. Changing a way of living to comfort with
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definitely cannot
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cause the sooner
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extinction.

In conclusion
, I believe that addressing with
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instead
of avoiding it is necessary to protect the environment
as well
as the Earth.
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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