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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v.31

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 31
Perhaps the greatest threat to the world is not the atomic bombs, the regional conflicts, terrorism, an outbreak of population or political instability but the climate change and environmental degradation. If we do not address this greatest danger properly, we will be responsible for our own extinction and I do not believe that we should let it happen by doing nothing about it. To begin with, the rising temperature, Arctic ice melt, deforestation, uncontrolled industrialization, air pollution and depletion of the ozone layer are all connected and would lead to a single event- the destruction of the world. We have already harmed the environment to a great extent and the time has come for all nations to work together to reduce the environmental damage. The sudden flood in the USA, intense storm in Asian countries, unpredictable droughts in African countries are all resulting from the climate change and this change is occurring rapidly than ever before. If we let this continue, the future would be even more perilous. According to the Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change, consequences of climate changes include increased intensity of storms including tropical cyclones, increased risks of drought and, a wetter Asian monsoon, and, possibly, more intense mid-latitude storms. According to a 2001 report, global warming would cause sea levels to rise up to 4 feet by 2100 and many countries including some South Asian countries would suffer greatly from that. The last thing the human should do to turn a blind eye to this imminent problem and learn to live with it, of course, if we do not want the termination of the human race. There is a lot to do and we should start implementing regional cooperation right now. Every individual should contribute by emitting less fumes and planting as many trees as possible while the use of fossil fuel should be globally prohibited. Industrial countries have more responsibilities as they contribute more to the environmental degradation and an international panel should be formed with giving it a supreme power to make any legislation to kerb the environmental damages. To conclude, for our own existence in the mother Earth, we should take immediate actions both in individual and international level to check the climate change. Otherwise, we will fail to save our planet.
Perhaps the greatest threat to the world is not the atomic bombs, the regional conflicts, terrorism, an outbreak of population or political instability
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climate
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change
and
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environmental
degradation. If we do not address this greatest
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danger
properly
, we will be responsible for our
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own
extinction and I do not believe that we should
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let
it happen by doing nothing about it.

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begin
with, the rising temperature, Arctic ice melt, deforestation, uncontrolled industrialization, air pollution and depletion of the ozone layer are all connected and would lead to a single
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event
- the destruction of the world. We have already harmed the environment to a great extent and the time has
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come
for all nations to work together to
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reduce
the
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environmental
damage. The sudden flood in the USA, intense storm in Asian
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countries
, unpredictable droughts in African
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countries
are all resulting from the
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climate
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change
and this
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change
is occurring
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rapidly
than ever
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before
. If we
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let
this continue, the future would be even more perilous. According to the Intergovernmental Panel on
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Climate
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Change
, consequences of
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climate
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changes
include increased intensity of storms including tropical cyclones, increased
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risks
of drought and, a wetter Asian monsoon, and,
possibly
, more intense mid-latitude storms. According to a 2001 report, global warming would cause sea levels to rise up to
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4 feet
by 2100 and
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many
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countries
including
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some
South Asian
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countries
would suffer
greatly
from that.

The last thing the human should do to turn a blind eye to this imminent problem and learn to
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live
with it,
of course
, if we do not want the termination of the human race. There is a lot to
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do and
we should
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start
implementing regional cooperation right
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now
. Every individual should contribute by emitting
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less
fumes and planting as
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many
trees as possible while the
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use
of fossil fuel should be globally prohibited. Industrial
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countries
have more responsibilities as they contribute more to the
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environmental
degradation and an international panel should
be formed
with giving it a supreme power to
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make
any legislation to
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kerb
the
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environmental
damages.

To conclude
, for our
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own
existence in the mother Earth, we should take immediate actions both in individual and international level to
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check
the
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climate
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change
.
Otherwise
, we will fail to save our planet.
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 31

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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