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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. v.38

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. v. 38
E-commerce has dramatically changed the way people do business and purchase products and services. With billions of Internet users, online shopping is no longer a theory, rather it has changed people’s lifestyle and buying habits to a great extent. With the exception of few disadvantages, online shopping has tremendous benefits and it will dominate the global business even more in the coming days to make people’s life easier. To begin with, online shopping enables consumers to get a service or a product from home. They no longer need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue to pay their bills or withdraw cash. With the widespread use of the hand-held smart devices and the Internet, shopping is just a few finger taps away. This saves valuable times and enables people to use plastic money which is more secure than conventional transactions. Moreover, online banking, ticket booking system, e-payment and online-subscriptions facilitate mass people to avoid traffic congestion and help maintain a green environment. From a business owner’s perspective, online shopping permits them to run the business 24x7 and without the need for any extra staff, utility bills and so on. This permits them to offer products at a more competitive price. Furthermore, consumers enjoy a great freedom to purchase global products from renowned websites like eBay and Amazon and compare the quality and price of a product before making a purchasing decision. Perhaps the most noticeable benefit of this trend is the unparalleled opportunity it has brought for ordinary people to open their own online shops and run small businesses online. This would never have happened without the boom of online business trends. Among the drawbacks of online shopping, identity theft and digital scams are more common. Careless use of a credit card or sensitive personal information can often invite intruders and hackers to harm someone. Finally, online shopping does not allow someone to physically inspect a product before buying it and this often leads to customer dissatisfaction. However, these demerits can easily be avoided by being cautious and relying on reputed brands. To conclude, the overwhelming benefits online shopping offers far outweigh the few demerits it has. I personally am an online shopper and I believe that this has immensely improved our freedom of shopping and lifestyle.
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dramatically
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changed
the way
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people
do
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business
and
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purchase
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products
and services. With billions of Internet users,
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online
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shopping
is no longer a theory,
rather
it has
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changed
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people’s
lifestyle and buying habits to a great extent.
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With the exception of
few disadvantages,
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online
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shopping
has tremendous benefits and it will dominate the global
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business
even more in the coming days to
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make
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people’s
life easier.

To
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begin
with,
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online
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shopping
enables consumers to
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get
a service or a
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product
from home. They no longer need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue to pay their bills or withdraw cash. With the widespread
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use
of the hand-held smart devices and the Internet,
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shopping
is
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just
a few finger taps away. This saves valuable times and enables
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people
to
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use
plastic money which is more secure than conventional transactions.
Moreover
,
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online
banking, ticket booking system, e-payment and online-subscriptions facilitate mass
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people
to avoid traffic congestion and
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help
maintain a green environment. From a
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business
owner’s perspective,
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online
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shopping
permits them to run the
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business
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24x7
and without the need for any extra staff, utility bills and
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so
on. This permits them to offer
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products
at a more competitive price.
Furthermore
, consumers enjoy
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a great freedom
to
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purchase
global
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products
from renowned websites like eBay and Amazon and compare the quality and price of a
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product
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before
making a purchasing decision. Perhaps the most noticeable benefit of this trend is the unparalleled opportunity it has brought for ordinary
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people
to open their
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own
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online
shops and run
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small
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businesses
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online
. This would never have happened without the boom of
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online
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business
trends.

Among the drawbacks of
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online
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shopping
, identity theft and digital scams are more common. Careless
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use
of a credit card or sensitive personal information can
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often
invite intruders and hackers to harm someone.
Finally
,
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online
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does not
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allow
someone to
physically
inspect a
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product
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before
buying it and this
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often
leads to customer dissatisfaction.
However
, these demerits can
easily
be avoided
by being cautious and relying on reputed brands.

To conclude
, the overwhelming benefits
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online
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shopping
offers far outweigh the few demerits it has. I
personally
am an
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online
shopper and I believe that this has
immensely
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improved
our freedom of
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shopping
and lifestyle.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. v. 38

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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