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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.21

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 21
It is a common belief that the best way to get handle with living, climate change rather than trying to escape it. I firmly disagree with this argument in terms of some reasons which I will explain in this essay. In the modern life, technology devices, motor cars, fabricates will have been developing dramatically. Thus, the temperature, and also air pollution had been rising day by day, so the climate has changed. Therefore, to limited of them, some measures could assure by the governments in many countries. For instance, a small town which located industrial area in Turkey, Gelibolu has protected by authorities and some activists. They think about if a basic precaution had saved small, distinctive, an increased and confirmed one would have inhibited changing of climate. That is to say, even if a small recycling or a nature friendly production in the fabricates can affect in a good way the environment. Their protection results have shown it. On the other hand, all consuming and construction rate's are skyrocketing impact to the environment by a detrimental effect. Admittedly, some harmful sign of humanity can not restrict on the nature. However, straightforward habits can altered by the individual. For example, to limited to use some perfume or deodorants is beneficial for the atmosphere. Due to educate all people is seems to take time, but every single step is so important for the next generation. For this reason, the governments and health ministry managements should educate the citizens in order to be aware of it. The climate change can prevent, if everybody takes care of its importance. In conclusion, I restate that some precautions can be useful to prevent destroying of nature. Not only simple ways, also harsh measures should be enacted by the authorities. In addition, every person should take an eye on their neighbourhoods to not do the harmful influence of the atmosphere. I completely agree, nature save is a duty for everybody, our heritage to our grandchild fresh water and oxygen.
It is a common belief that the best way to
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get
handle with living,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
rather
than trying to escape it. I
firmly
disagree with this argument in terms of
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some
reasons which I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
in this essay.

In the modern life, technology devices, motor cars, fabricates will have been developing
dramatically
.
Thus
, the temperature, and
also
air pollution had been rising day by day,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
.
Therefore
, to limited of them,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measures could assure by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
in
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many
countries.
For instance
, a
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small
town which located industrial area in Turkey,
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Gelibolu
has protected by authorities and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
activists. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about if a basic precaution had saved
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
, distinctive, an increased and confirmed one would have inhibited changing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
.
That is
to say, even if a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
recycling or a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
friendly production in the fabricates can affect in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
way the environment. Their protection results have shown it.

On the other hand
, all consuming and construction
Consider using the plural form here: "rates".
rate's
are skyrocketing impact to the environment by a detrimental effect.
Admittedly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
harmful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
of humanity can not restrict on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
.
However
, straightforward habits can altered by the individual.
For example
, to limited to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
perfume or deodorants is beneficial for the atmosphere. Due to educate all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
is
seems to take time,
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but
every single step is
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so
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important
for the
next
generation.
For this reason
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
and health ministry managements should educate the citizens in order to be aware of it. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
can
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prevent
, if everybody takes care of its importance.

In conclusion
, I restate that
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some
precautions can be useful to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
destroying of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
simple ways,
also
harsh measures should
be enacted
by the authorities.
In addition
, every person should take an eye on their
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neighbourhoods
to not do the harmful influence of the atmosphere. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
save is a duty for everybody, our heritage to our grandchild fresh water and oxygen.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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