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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.29

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 29
Change in climate pattern has become major threaten for human survival in these days. Some people state that we need to adapt to different weather formats rather than protecting the environment, but others believe that we should protect the weather pattern. There are several feisty debates on this throughout the world. I have not completely accord with this. Let me slice and dice the pros and cons of climate change and emphasize my view in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, In this contemporary era, global warming in a vital challenge for human life. Mainly some people believe that preventing nature is not an easy task. Hence lets endurance the changes of climate pattern. Secondly, they claim that individuals have nothing to do with these changes and as a person cannot prevent the entire world. For example, Lifestyle has completely changed because of those changes, pollution has drastically increased. There is no point blaming a single person on this thus a person unable to take responsibility to save the earth. Finally, people state that is being a roman if you are in the Roman street so they believe admitting changes is the most preferable move. On the other hand, many people tend to live along with nature they believe that climate changes have been a clear sign of fatality. Firstly, They believe that human has a huge response in protecting natural resource which definitely helps ourself from major disasters. In fact, humans are a major cause for all sorts of pollution and global warming. Research from Cambridge university state that 75% of wild animals will die due to climate change in the next decade. Moreover, each person has to change life patterns to prevent nature and also create awareness to several industries and factories for producing pollution. I would like to conclude by stating that it is humans' vital role to protect nature and also prevent global warming to have a fruitful life in the future. As people say where there is a will there is a way so it is our response to prevent climate.
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has become major threaten for
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human
survival in these days.
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people
state that we need to adapt to
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different
weather formats
rather
than protecting the environment,
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others
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believe
that we should protect the weather
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pattern
. There are several feisty debates on this throughout the world. I have not completely
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accord
with this.
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Let
me slice and dice the pros and cons of
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climate
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change
and emphasize my view in the following paragraphs.

On the one hand, In this contemporary era, global warming in a vital challenge for
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human
life.
Mainly
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some
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people
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believe
that preventing
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nature
is not an easy task.
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lets
endurance the
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changes
of
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climate
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pattern
.
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, they claim that individuals have nothing to do with these
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changes
and as a
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person
cannot
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prevent
the entire world.
For example
, Lifestyle has completely
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changed
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because
of those
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, pollution has
drastically
increased. There is no point blaming a single
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person
on this
thus
a
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person
unable to take responsibility to save the earth.
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,
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state
that is
being a roman if you are in the Roman street
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so
they
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believe
admitting
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changes
is the most preferable
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move
.

On the other hand
,
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many
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people
tend to
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along with
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nature
they
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that
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climate
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changes
have been a
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clear
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sign
of fatality.
Firstly
, They
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that
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has a huge response in protecting natural resource which definitely
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helps
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ourself
from major disasters. In fact,
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humans
are a major cause for all sorts of pollution and global warming. Research from Cambridge university state that 75% of wild animals will
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die
due to
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climate
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change
in the
next
decade.
Moreover
, each
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person
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has to
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change
life
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patterns
to
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prevent
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nature
and
also
create awareness to several industries and factories for producing pollution.

I would like
to conclude
by stating that it is humans' vital role to protect
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nature
and
also
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prevent
global warming to have a fruitful life in the future. As
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people
say where there is a will there is a way
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so
it is our response to
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prevent
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climate
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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