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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.17

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 17
Undoubtedly, these days, either people have to find a way to better weather conditions or adapt themselves in response to climate changes. It is often argued that people are able to adapt themselves to climate alterations, but it lasts for thousand years. I fully agree with this fact that it is better for people to remodel climate and not to try to reconcile themselves with this situation. In turn, this essay will discuss why preventing climate remodeling is better than adapting to this circumstance and the possible ways for people to alter climate. On the one hand, the more climate alters, the more life becomes harder. That is to say that people were able to suit themselves with the present climate within the millions of years, therefore humans cannot live easily with altered weather, while are able to quickly exchange their conditions lives. As a strategy, people can plant trees to decrease global warming, which nowadays is converted to a serious problem for governments. Trees are unthinkably capable to absorb the CO2 (carbon dioxide), which in high concentrations can damage human body cells and eventually leads to cell death. For instance, in forest countries, several kinds of cancers such as breast, brain, chest and stem cell cancers are extremely rare. In my opinion, enhancement of cultivated trees can secure the survival of planet Earth. To sum up, tree cultivation can help people to change the climate, significantly. On the other hand, the more increased consumption of fossil fuels, the more altered climate. Approximately all scientists believe that consumption of fossil fuels increase the atmospheric pollutants as well as the weather temperature causing several damages to the environment such as increased melting icebergs and fires. For example, in the recent decade that the weather temperature of the world became warmer by up to 2 oC, the rate of fires over the world increased by up to 12%. Therefore, usage of fossil fuels is considered as the main agent of global warming. I believe that consumption of fossil fuels must be reduced by humans to decreased atmospheric pollutants happens. To take something into consideration, people have to decrease the consumption of fossil fuels, significantly. Alongside these contents, in some situations, people can adapt themselves with difficult environmental conditions not easily but hardly. Some people are of the opinion that modification of climate change can happen easily, while others are opposed to this view. I am sure that the enhancement of cultivated trees and reduction of consuming fossil fuels can help people to propel the climate changes to the desired side.
Undoubtedly
, these days, either
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people
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have to
find a way to better
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weather
conditions or adapt themselves in response to
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climate
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changes
. It is
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often
argued that
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people
are able to adapt themselves to
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climate
alterations,
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but
it lasts for
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thousand
years. I
fully
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agree
with this fact that it is better for
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people
to remodel
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climate
and not to try to reconcile themselves with this situation. In turn, this essay will discuss why preventing
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climate
remodeling is better than adapting to this circumstance and the possible ways for
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people
to alter climate.

On the one hand, the more
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climate
alters, the more life becomes harder.
That is
to say that
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people
were able to suit themselves with the present
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climate
within the millions of years,
therefore
humans cannot
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live
easily
with altered
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weather
, while are able to
quickly
exchange their conditions
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lives
. As a strategy,
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people
can plant
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trees
to decrease global warming, which nowadays
is converted
to a serious problem for
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governments
.
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Trees
are
unthinkably
capable to absorb the CO2 (carbon dioxide), which in high concentrations can damage human body cells and
eventually
leads to cell death.
For instance
, in forest countries, several kinds of cancers such as breast, brain, chest and stem cell cancers are
extremely
rare. In my opinion, enhancement of cultivated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
can secure the survival of planet Earth. To sum up,
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tree
cultivation can
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help
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people
to
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change
the
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climate
,
significantly
.

On the other hand
, the more increased
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
, the more altered
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climate
. Approximately all scientists believe that
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consumption
of
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fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
increase the atmospheric pollutants
as well
as the
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weather
temperature causing several damages to the environment such as increased melting icebergs and fires.
For example
, in the recent decade that the
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weather
temperature of the world became warmer by up to 2
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oC
, the rate of fires over the world increased by up to 12%.
Therefore
, usage of
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fossil
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fuels
is considered
as the main agent of global warming. I believe that
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
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must
be
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reduced
by humans to decreased atmospheric pollutants happens. To take something into consideration,
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people
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have to
decrease the
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
,
significantly
. Alongside these contents, in
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some
situations,
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people
can adapt themselves with difficult environmental conditions not
easily
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but
The adverb 'hardly' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
hardly
.

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Some
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people
are of the opinion that modification of
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climate
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change
can happen
easily
, while others
are opposed
to this view. I am sure that the enhancement of cultivated
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trees
and reduction of consuming
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fossil
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fuels
can
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help
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people
to propel the
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climate
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changes
to the desired side.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
428 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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