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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.16

It is irrefutable fact that climate change has become a serious threat for society in these days. Therefore, some people believe that we should discover a way to survive with climate change rather than try to stop it. However, I reckon that accepting the climate change without doing anything is preposterous idea. As a consequence, People and government should take some effective measures to eradicate this problem. To begin with, there is no iota of doubt that human beings are responsible for climate disastrous. To elaborate further, humans use plethora of private vehicles which emit carbon dioxide in the environment, It is detrimental not only for people but also DISTAOROUS for flaura and fauna. Moreover, in humans are responsible for deforestation. they clea The proliferation of large number of cutting tress brings more climate issues for people. A closer analysis done at the University of America reveals that 80 percent of climate disastrous are occurred due to human illegal activities. In order to mitigate this issue, people can take some serious steps. First of all, they should use more public transportation as compare to private vehicles. Apart from this, people should do more aforestation and Additionally, government should also make contribution to stop climate change problems. Government should not only impose some hefty fine on people who use their own private vehicles but also subsidize the bus fare to motivate people for using the public transportation. Also, government can introduce some laws to limit the emission of carbon dioxide leads to global warming. After discussing all of the aforementioned ideas, it can be reiterated that through the joint efforts of people and government to mitigate the climate change problem.
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climate
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change
has become a serious threat for society in these days.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
believe that we should discover a way to survive with
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climate
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change
rather
than try to
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stop
it.
However
, I reckon that accepting the
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climate
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change
without doing anything is preposterous
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idea
. As a consequence,
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People
and
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government
should take
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some
effective measures to eradicate this problem.

To
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begin
with, there is no iota of doubt that
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human
beings are responsible for
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climate
disastrous. To elaborate
further
,
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humans
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use
plethora of private vehicles which emit carbon dioxide in the environment, It is detrimental not
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only
for
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people
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but
also
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DISTAOROUS
for
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flaura
and fauna.
Moreover
, in
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humans
are responsible for deforestation.
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they
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clea
The proliferation of large number of cutting tress brings more
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issues for
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people
. A closer analysis done at the University of America reveals that 80 percent of
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climate
disastrous
are occurred
due to
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human
illegal activities.

In order to mitigate this issue,
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people
can take
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some
serious steps.
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First of all
, they should
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use
more public transportation as compare to private vehicles. Apart from this,
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people
should do more
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aforestation
and
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,
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government
should
also
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make
contribution to
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stop
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climate
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change
problems.
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Government
should not
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only
impose
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some
hefty fine on
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people
who
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use
their
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own
private vehicles
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but
also
subsidize the bus fare to motivate
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people
for using the public transportation.
Also
,
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government
can introduce
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some
laws to limit the emission of carbon dioxide leads to global warming.

After discussing
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all of the
aforementioned
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ideas
, it can
be reiterated
that through the joint efforts of
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people
and
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government
to mitigate the
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climate
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change
problem.
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need find a way to live with it.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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