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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.15

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 15
In recent decades, global warming has been receiving a great deal of media attention around the world due to its substantial impacts on human life. Although the idea of coexistence between climate change and humans appears reasonable, this cannot be viewed as the ultimate approach for humankind to combat climate change. There are a number of reasons why the coexistence can do more harm than good. First, climate change is largely shaped by human-caused geoengineering rather than nature itself. For example, in order to produce the energy that drives the world’s economy, most nations rely on carbon- rich fuels like coal, oil and gas, which directly correlates with the intensification of global warming. Second, even if citizens agree to keep the environment the way it is, corporations, especially in the manufacturing and mining industries, would not as that would affect their profits. Therefore, it can be implied that if corporations were not held accountable for their contribution to global warming as in the case of coexistence, the issue of climate change would inevitably be exacerbated. It is more economically sound to actively prevent climate change than to ignore it. In fact, the costs, either financial or non-financial, of dealing with future consequences of climate change can be overwhelming. For instance, the increase in intensity and frequency of storms can cause massive destructions and deaths in many coastal areas, which would take decades to recover. In addition, rising temperatures have also contributed to the extinction of species worldwide. It should be noted that the extinction is irreversible and comes at great cost to the ecosystem and apparently humans living within it. In conclusion, actively combating global warming must be regarded as top priority given the high urgency. Governments and corporations worldwide should take steps to ensure that climate change remains at bay.
In recent decades,
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global
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warming
has been receiving a great deal of media attention around the world due to its substantial impacts on human life. Although the
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idea
of coexistence between
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climate
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change
and humans appears reasonable, this cannot
be viewed
as the ultimate approach for humankind to combat
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climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

There are a number of reasons why the coexistence can do more harm than
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good
.
First
,
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climate
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change
is
largely
shaped by human-caused geoengineering
rather
than nature itself.
For example
, in order to produce the energy that drives the world’s economy, most nations rely on carbon- rich fuels like coal, oil and gas, which
directly
correlates with the intensification of
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global
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warming
. Second, even if citizens
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agree
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the environment the way it is, corporations,
especially
in the manufacturing and mining industries, would not as that would affect their profits.
Therefore
, it can
be implied
that if corporations were not held accountable for their contribution to
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global
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warming
as in the case of coexistence, the issue of
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climate
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change
would
inevitably
be exacerbated
.

It is more
economically
sound to
actively
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prevent
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climate
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change
than to
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ignore
it. In fact, the costs, either financial or non-financial, of dealing with future consequences of
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climate
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change
can be overwhelming.
For instance
, the increase in intensity and frequency of storms can cause massive
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destructions
and deaths in
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many
coastal areas, which would take decades to recover.
In addition
, rising temperatures have
also
contributed to the extinction of species worldwide. It should
be noted
that the extinction is irreversible and
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comes
at great cost to the ecosystem and
apparently
humans living within it.

In conclusion
,
actively
combating
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global
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warming
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be regarded
as top priority
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given
the high urgency.
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Governments
and corporations worldwide should take steps to ensure that
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climate
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change
remains at bay.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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