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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.20

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 20
Ordinary citizens have no competence to help the habitat, while government and large corporations can make changes. While it is true that government and business can cope with environmental improvements, I believe it is people who can and should contribute more. There are several reasons why I believe that people are the ones who contribute most to Mother Nature, after all, it is in her that we live and that we will live until our death. Every citizen can plant a tree and this will have a very good impact on the air of a city, for example. Everyone can learn to recycle garbage properly and this is another way to help our territory. Another excellent way to help our world is to spend less water, such as taking shorter baths and thus avoid wasting unnecessary water. Another great initiative that has become more popular among the people who are involved in a better world is to use environmentally friendly products. For example, I myself try to buy my makeup that certifies that they are free from cruelty to animals, that they use the most natural products possible, free from aggressive chemistry and so on. In conclusion, everyone can help the environment, everyone can do their part regardless of whether the government does or not. The important thing is to be engaged for a better and healthier world for all.
Ordinary citizens have no competence to
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help
the habitat, while
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government
and large corporations can
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make
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changes
. While it is true that
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government
and business can cope with environmental improvements, I believe it is
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people
who can and should contribute more.

There are several reasons why I believe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are the ones who contribute most to Mother Nature,
after all
, it is in her that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and that we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
until our death. Every citizen can plant a tree and this will have a
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very
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good
impact on the air of a city,
for example
. Everyone can learn to recycle garbage
properly
and this is another way to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
our territory. Another excellent way to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
our world is to spend less water, such as taking shorter baths and
thus
avoid wasting unnecessary water.

Another great initiative that has become more popular among the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
are involved
in a better world is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
environmentally
friendly products.
For example
, I myself try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
my makeup that certifies that they are free from cruelty to animals, that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the most natural products possible, free from aggressive chemistry and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.

In conclusion
, everyone can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
the environment, everyone can do their part regardless of whether the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
does or not. The
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
thing is to
be engaged
for a better and healthier world for all.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
230 words
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