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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it v.14

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it v. 14
Climate change represents a major threat to life on Earth, but some people argue that we need to accept it rather than stop it. I absolutely disagree with this opinion, because I believe that we still have more time to tackle this issue and reduce the human impact on the Earth's climate. There are various measures that governments and individuals could take to prevent, or at least mitigate, climate change. Governments could introduce the law to reduce the carbon dioxide emission that lead to global warming. They could impose "green taxes" on drivers, airline companies and other polluters, and they could invest in renewable energy production from solar, wind or water power. As individuals, we should also try to limit our contribution to climate change, by becoming more energy efficient, by flying less, and by using bicycles and public transport. Furthermore, the public can affect the action of governments by voting for politicians who propose to tackle climate change, rather than for those who would prefer to ignore it. If instead of taking the above measures we simply try to live with climate change, I believe that the consequences will be disastrous. To give just one example, I am not optimistic that we would be able to cope with even a small rise in sea levels. Millions of people would be displaced by flooding, particularly in countries that do not have the means to safeguard low-lying areas. These people would lose their homes and their jobs, and they would be forced to migrate to nearby cities or perhaps to other countries. The potential for human suffering would be huge, and it is likely that we would see outbreaks of disease as well as increased homelessness and poverty. In conclusion, it is clear to me that we must address the problem of climate change, and I disagree with those who argue that we can find ways to live with it.
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change
represents a major threat to life on Earth,
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but
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some
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people
argue that we need to accept it
rather
than
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stop
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absolutely
disagree with this opinion,
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because
I believe that we
still
have more time to tackle this issue and
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reduce
the human impact on the Earth's climate.

There are various measures that
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governments
and individuals could take to
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prevent
, or at least mitigate,
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climate
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change
.
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Governments
could introduce the law to
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reduce
the carbon dioxide emission that lead to global warming. They could impose
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green taxes
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on drivers, airline
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companies
and other polluters, and they could invest in renewable energy production from solar, wind or water power. As individuals, we should
also
try to limit our contribution to
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climate
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change
, by becoming more energy efficient, by flying less, and by using bicycles and public transport.
Furthermore
, the public can affect the action of
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governments
by voting for politicians who propose to tackle
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climate
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change
,
rather
than for those who would prefer to
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ignore
it.

If
instead
of taking the above measures we
simply
try to
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live
with
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climate
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change
, I believe that the consequences will be disastrous. To give
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just
one example, I am not optimistic that we would be able to cope with even a
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small
rise in sea levels. Millions of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would
be displaced
by flooding,
particularly
in countries that do not have the means to safeguard low-lying areas. These
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would lose their homes and their jobs, and they would
be forced
to migrate to nearby cities or perhaps to other countries. The potential for human suffering would be huge, and it is likely that we would
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see
outbreaks of disease
as well
as increased homelessness and poverty.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
to me that we
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must
address the problem of
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climate
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change
, and I disagree with those who argue that we can find ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with it.
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IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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