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Some people think that health care should be free for everyone. Others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves. Discuss both the views with your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that health care should be free for everyone. Others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves. v. 1
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Caring for fitness is a major part of our life, without it, life cannot
be survived
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in a pretty way
. A few
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people
believe that the well-being,
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responsibilityduty
of the
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people
should not
be paid
for everyone, while others
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think
that
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medical
cost should not be
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free
for everybody. Not
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only
both views will be
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explained
,
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but
my
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own
opinion would
be elaborated
in the subsequent
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paragraphs


Discussing the
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fast
points, there are a few reasons why strength,
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responsibilityauthority
should be
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free
,
firstly
as several
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people
cannot afford it
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because
of poverty, to them the one option is
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given
by the administration in order to save them from diseases, which is energy authority it is
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free
of cost.
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for
instance, in
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some
nations, including South Africa, Thailand, as were 85 percentage masses of those counties are poor, they cannot
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pay
for their energy power.
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therefore
all over the world
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medical
restraint should be
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given
by
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governments
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free
of cost in order to they could
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live
to save.

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on
the other hand, it is
generally
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seen
that in most countries for
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medical
power,
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people
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pay
money for their treatment by themselves. If they don't
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pay
for
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medical
power, a number of individuals will not prefer to do a
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medical
study. Owning to this
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a lot of
diseases are
being disseminated
in the nation in this way life will
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destroy
for example
, according to a survey, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that in the united state of America each and every individual
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pay
money for their insurance to the
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governments
,
therefore
, they
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only
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pay
for insurance while having any
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medical
treatment.

In conclusion
, this essay highlighted that
even though
the public is paying money for their strength care, the advantage of the insurance is
being taken
by
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many
.
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however
, I believe that any
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medical
treatment should be
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free
for those, who are poor.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that health care should be free for everyone. Others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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