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Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.4

Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. 4
About governments investment in public transport, two opposing views have been suggested, one of which is related to the construction of more railways, while the other is about structures of new roads. From my perspective, governments should pay more attention to railways, since it is more beneficial for communities. According to the perspective of some, the benefits of railways are more than the advantages of road vehicles. The rationale behind their thought might be the safety and convenience that have been provided by trains, particularly high-speed trains. I also support this point of view and believe that people can access a variety of amenities on a train such as toilets, a small cafe and wider seats with more leg space. It also should be considered that high-speed trains are available to carry hundreds of people at once, and they are faster than any road vehicles. For some other people, however, privacy might have importance, and they do not wish to travel with others. Besides, parents who have children at school age usually prefer driving them to school while they commute to work by a personal vehicle. Yet, I am not on the same page as these people. To my way of thinking, driving cars pollute the air with car fumes and waste non-renewable natural resources. From where I stand, people might be more sensitive to using any personal vehicle, whether they do not have to. So current roads can be enough for the community. In conclusion, what can be concluded from the aforementioned remarks is that although some individuals advocate spending more money into new roads, I firmly believe that railways have more benefits for not only communities but also nature. Because of these reasons, governments might spare more resources for railways.
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governments
investment in public transport, two opposing views have
been suggested
, one of which
is related
to the construction of more
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railways
, while the other is about structures of new
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roads
. From my perspective,
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governments
should pay more attention to
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railways
, since it is more beneficial for communities.

According to the perspective of
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some
, the benefits of
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railways
are more than the advantages of
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road
vehicles. The rationale behind their
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thought
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might
be the safety and convenience that have
been provided
by
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trains
,
particularly
high-speed
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trains
. I
also
support this point of view and believe that
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people
can access a variety of amenities on a
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train
such as toilets, a
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small
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cafe
and wider seats with more leg space. It
also
should
be considered
that high-speed
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trains
are available to carry hundreds of
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people
at once, and they are faster than any
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road
vehicles.

For
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some
other
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people
,
however
, privacy
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might
have importance, and they do not wish to travel with others.
Besides
, parents who have children at school age
usually
prefer driving them to school while they commute to work by a personal vehicle.
Yet
, I am not on the same page as these
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people
. To my way of thinking, driving cars pollute the air with car fumes and waste non-renewable natural resources. From where I stand,
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people
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might
be more sensitive to using any personal vehicle, whether they do not
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have to
.
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So
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current
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roads
can be
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enough
for the community.

In conclusion
, what can
be concluded
from the aforementioned remarks is that although
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some
individuals advocate spending more money into new
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roads
, I
firmly
believe that
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railways
have more benefits for not
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only
communities
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but
also
nature.
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Because
of these reasons,
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governments
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might
spare more resources for
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railways
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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