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It has been said that people who read for pleasure have more developed imaginations and better language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

It has been said that people who read for pleasure have more developed imaginations and better language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. v. 2
It is true that the habits of reading books and watching TV have gained in popularity over the past few decades, making a paradigm shift in the lifestyle of every human on Earth. Although some believe that watching TV is a common way to spend their leisure time, in my opinion, those who prefer reading books become more imaginative and capable of using the language. When comparing to watching TV, reading books contributes to the improvement of readers’ imaginations. First, by reading a variety of book genres, such as science-fiction or novel, readers can not only enhance their literacy but also develop the critical thinking. While TV just broadcasts its man-made visual images, reading book forces readers to understand written words, which acts as an incentive for them to imagine. Second, audiences who addict TV are susceptible to become passive as constant pictures are already displayed before them. In fact, if pictures are shown on the screen, audiences will just accept what they see, which leads to restricted imagination. Another compelling reason is that reading can benefit readers’ language skill. By reading books, readers’ language skills, such as their writing skill or vocabularies, will be improved. For example, TV fans are unwilling to find out their writing skill may be declining, which is proved by spelling or grammatical mistakes they make in writing. in addition, most of TV programs are spoken in an oral style in order to approach a variety of audiences. This means that those languages are not as formal and precise as the ones in books, which are beneficial for developing language skills. In conclusion, I believe that reading for pleasure enhances language skill and imaginations. By doing more reading instead of viewing TV, people’s knowledge would be improved in a variety of ways.
It is true that the habits of
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and watching TV have gained in popularity over the past few decades, making a paradigm shift in the lifestyle of every human on Earth. Although
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some
believe that watching TV is a common way to spend their leisure time, in my opinion, those who prefer
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reading
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become more imaginative and capable of using the language.

When comparing to watching TV,
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contributes to the improvement of readers’ imaginations.
First
, by
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a variety of
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book
genres, such as science-fiction or novel, readers can not
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enhance their literacy
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also
develop the critical thinking. While TV
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just
broadcasts its
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man
-made visual images,
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reading
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book
forces readers to understand written words, which acts as an incentive for them to imagine. Second, audiences who addict TV are susceptible to become passive as constant pictures are already displayed
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before
them. In fact, if pictures
are shown
on the screen, audiences will
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just
accept what they
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see
, which leads to restricted imagination.

Another compelling reason is that
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can benefit readers’
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language
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skill
. By
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books
, readers’
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language
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skills
, such as their writing
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skill
or vocabularies, will be
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improved
.
For example
, TV fans are unwilling to find out their writing
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skill
may be declining, which
is proved
by spelling or grammatical mistakes they
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in writing.
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addition,
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programs
are spoken
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in an oral style
in order to approach a variety of audiences. This means that those
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languages
are not as formal and precise as the ones in
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books
, which are beneficial for developing
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language
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skills
.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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reading
for pleasure enhances
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language
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skill
and imaginations. By doing more
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reading
instead
of viewing TV,
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people
’s knowledge would be
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improved
in a variety of ways.
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Language is to the mind more than light is to the eye.
William Gibson

IELTS essay It has been said that people who read for pleasure have more developed imaginations and better language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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