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Some people think that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefits of human beings, while other people argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people think that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefits of human beings, while other people argue that it is wrong. v. 3
As a negative scenario, it is stated that animal experiments ought to be conducted and practiced in the modern world. Although many people are in support of using animal testing for advancing medicines, I personally consider that animal testing is morally wrong due to some upcoming reasons. The main reason why some people conduct animal experiments for medical research is that animal testing has contributed to many life-saving cures and treatments. It is true that nearly every medical breakthrough over the last 10 years has resulted directly from inquiry using animals. Animal experiments have provided people with a chance to discover remedies for a number of diseases and enabled mankind to evade viruses as well as infections. Furthermore, it is impossible to release new drugs to the market before proving that it has no harm to humans without tasting effects of drugs on animals since they are similar to human-beings in many ways. In this way, animal experiments are supposed to assist people to combat and deal with illnesses. On the other hand, I side with people who opine that medical development that involved the use of animals is cruel and unacceptable. I consider that lives of all creatures ought to be respected and we have no rights to make animals suffer for our own benefits. Moreover, using animals for research also contributes to the extinction of many species. Therefore, the government should take radical measures and find alternative methods of using animal experimentation while carrying out medical scrutiny. In this way, not only can we save our fauna, but also foster development of medicines. To conclude, although animal testing has helped people in both drug developments and medical discoveries, I am of the opinion that government ought to find other methods so as not to force animals suffer.
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people
are in support of using
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animal
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testing
for advancing medicines, I
personally
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animal
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testing
is
morally
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wrong
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upcoming reasons.

The main reason why
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some
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people
conduct
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animal
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for
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medical
research is that
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animal
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testing
has contributed to
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many
life-saving cures and treatments. It is true that
nearly
every
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medical
breakthrough over the last 10 years has resulted
directly
from inquiry using
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animals
.
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Animal
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experiments
have provided
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people
with a chance to discover remedies for a number of diseases and enabled mankind to evade viruses
as well
as infections.
Furthermore
, it is impossible to release new drugs to the market
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before
proving that it has no harm to humans without tasting effects of drugs on
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animals
since they are similar to human-beings in
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many
ways. In this way,
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animal
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experiments
are supposed
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people
to combat and deal with illnesses.

On the other hand
, I side with
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people
who opine that
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medical
development that involved the
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use
of
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animals
is cruel and unacceptable. I consider that
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lives
of all creatures ought to be
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respected and
we have no rights to
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make
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animals
suffer for our
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own
benefits.
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, using
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animals
for research
also
contributes to the extinction of
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many
species.
Therefore
, the
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government
should take radical measures and find alternative methods of using
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animal
experimentation while carrying out
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medical
scrutiny. In this way, not
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only
can we save our fauna,
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but
also
foster development of medicines.

To conclude
, although
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animal
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testing
has
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helped
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people
in both drug developments and
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medical
discoveries, I am of the opinion that
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government
ought to find other methods
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so
as not to force
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animals
suffer.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefits of human beings, while other people argue that it is wrong. v. 3

Essay
  American English
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299 words
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