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Some people think that governments should spend money on Railways. Others believe that there should be more investment Indu new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.2

Since the invention of the first locomotive to date, there has been continuous development in railway technology with better and faster trains being developed over time. At present, many people put forward their opinion in the favour of government's spending of a larger amount of budget on the railways in contrast to the roadways. Supporting the statement, I believe that government should develop new railway lines and improve the existing condition of railways that will solve many of the transportation-related problems of the modern-day. Firstly, the railway is one of the best means of transportation in the modern world that allows commuters to travel long distances relatively fast and safely that demands the need for extension and upgrading of the railways. Obviously, trains are faster than roadway transport means like cars and buses, and trains are reliable and safer than roadway vehicles as fewer cases of railway accidents have been reported, unlike road accidents that are more frequent. Furthermore, with increased urbanization, the cities around the globe are getting densely populated that, eventually, is leading to an increased number of vehicles on the roads followed by serious problems like traffic congestion and fatal road accidents. In this context, enhancing railway transport can ensure the commuting of a relatively larger number of people, resulting in a reduction in the number of vehicles on the road that consequently mitigates the road accidents and traffic Jams. In conclusion, though roadways have been the dominant mode of transport till the present day, today's transportation needs to be efficient, faster and more reliable that can be well-served by the modern railways. Therefore, the government should consider allocating more budget for the railways as an alternative to the obsolete roadway transport.
Since the invention of the
first
locomotive to date, there has been continuous development in
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railway
technology with better and faster trains
being developed
over time. At present,
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many
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people
put forward their opinion in the
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favour
of
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government
's spending of a larger amount of budget on the
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railways
in contrast
to the
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roadways
. Supporting the statement, I believe that
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government
should develop new
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railway
lines and
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improve
the existing condition of
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railways
that will solve
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many
of the transportation-related problems of the modern-day.

Firstly
, the
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railway
is one of the best means of transportation in the modern world that
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allows
commuters to travel long distances
relatively
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fast
and
safely
that demands the need for extension and upgrading of the
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railways
.
Obviously
, trains are faster than
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roadway
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transport
means like cars and buses, and trains are reliable and safer than
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roadway
vehicles as fewer cases of
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railway
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accidents
have
been reported
, unlike
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road
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accidents
that are more frequent.

Furthermore
, with increased urbanization, the cities around the globe are getting
densely
populated that,
eventually
, is leading to an increased number of vehicles on the
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roads
followed by serious problems like traffic congestion and fatal
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road
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accidents
. In this context, enhancing
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railway
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transport
can ensure the commuting of a
relatively
larger number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, resulting in a reduction in the number of vehicles on the
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road
that
consequently
mitigates the
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road
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accidents
and traffic Jams.

In conclusion
, though
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roadways
have been the dominant mode of
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transport
till the present day,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
's transportation needs to be efficient, faster and more reliable that can be well-served by the modern
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railways
.
Therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should consider allocating more budget for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
as an alternative to the obsolete
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roadway
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that governments should spend more money on the railways rather than the roads. with the statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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