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Some people think that good health is very important to every person so medical service should not be ran by profit making companies Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages v.1

Some people think that good health is very important to every person so medical service should not be ran by profit making companies Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages v. 1
It is true that a lot of people spend their major part of life time at work, Being content with the job is the imperative element for personal well being. As there are a variety of reasons to have job satisfaction, However, it's not possible for every worker to be satisfied with their work. It is an irrefutable fact that job satisfaction is a dream for many because we are heading towards a very competitive lifestyle. Firstly, earning high salaries in order to have a comfortable life is a wish of everyone, so they can effort good housing, clothing, food and best medical. For example, people who earn high salaries are more likely to have a better living in terms of quality and comfort. Secondly, job security is another key reason to be relieved from any worries rather than stressing about loosing job anytime. Finally, the strict work atmosphere is also a serious matter for many because of which employees crave for pressure free workplace. Although, all the above, is highly inevitable in the real world. If an employee is content with one particular aspect of work than he or she will not be fine with another. The main reason for this is every employee is not versatile, so the employer will never pay a high salary for the mediocre one. For instance, Doctors pay scale in India is 50 times higher than any cleaner of the hospital. So it is absurd to aim high pay for every profession which means having everything that employees need at work is impossible for everyone in realistic globe. Therefore, it is not possible to have complete contentment in job for everyone. In conclusion, As adults spent most of their life at work, job satisfaction is considered as the main reason for staying happy in life which consists of various factors such as high pay and comfort, but it is illogical for every worker to have it.
It is true that
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a lot of
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people
spend their major part of
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life time
at
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work
, Being content with the
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job
is the imperative element for personal
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well being
. As there are a variety of
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reasons
to have
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job
satisfaction,
However
, it's not possible for every worker to
be satisfied
with their work.

It is an irrefutable fact that
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job
satisfaction is a dream for
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many
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because
we are heading towards a
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very
competitive lifestyle.
Firstly
, earning
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high
salaries in order to have a comfortable
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life
is a wish of everyone,
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so
they
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can effort
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good
housing, clothing, food and best medical.
For example
,
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people
who earn
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high
salaries are more likely to have a better living in terms of quality and comfort.
Secondly
,
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job
security is another key
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reason
to
be relieved
from any worries
rather
than stressing about loosing
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job
anytime.
Finally
, the strict
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work
atmosphere is
also
a serious matter for
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many
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because
of which
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employees
crave for pressure free workplace.

Although, all the above, is
highly
inevitable in the real world. If an
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employee
is content with one particular aspect of
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work
than he or she will not be fine with another. The main
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reason
for this is every
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employee
is not versatile,
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so
the employer will never
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pay
a
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high
salary for the mediocre one.
For instance
, Doctors
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pay
scale in India is 50 times higher than any cleaner of the hospital.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
it is absurd to aim
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high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
for every profession which means having everything that
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employees
need at
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work
is impossible for everyone in realistic globe.
Therefore
, it is not possible to have complete contentment in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
for everyone.

In conclusion
, As adults spent most of their
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life
at
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work
,
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job
satisfaction
is considered
as the main
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reason
for staying happy in
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life
which consists of various factors such as
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high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
and comfort,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it is illogical for every worker to have it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that good health is very important to every person so medical service should not be ran by profit making companies Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantages v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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