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1. In your opinion, what is the most important characteristic (for example, honesty, intelligence, a sense of humor) that a person can have to be successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your experience to explain your answer. When you w v.1

1. In your opinion, what is the most important characteristic (for example, honesty, intelligence, a sense of humor) that a person can have to be successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your experience to explain your answer. When you w v. 1
People today are capable of accessing the internet through their mobile smart device. This puts them in touch with an extremely large amount of information. Although this trend has many positive ramifications, such as inter connectivity between people and the spreading of understanding, it is not without drawbacks. To illustrate this, the effect smart devices have on their user’s memory and privacy will be analysed. For one, smart devices have caused people to rely less on their memories. For example, sites like Wikipedia make it easy for smartphone users to quickly access data on almost any topic. The problem with this convenience is that it encourages people to commit fewer and fewer things to memory, and this makes humanity’s collective understanding of the world increasingly dependent on machinery. Thus, this is one of the main drawbacks to having unrestricted access to information through smart devices. In addition to this, smart devices reduce people’s privacy, which can lead to unwanted exposure to public scrutiny and ridicule. For instance, last year a child in America was unknowingly filmed by his classmate while performing an embarrassing dance routine. After the video was uploaded to the internet, this child suffered extreme teasing and ultimately developed anxiety issues. As this shows, the exchanging of info through smart devices is not always a positive thing. As the above makes clear, smartphone use can weaken a user’s memory and reduce their privacy, two unfortunate drawbacks to a tool that has otherwise been very positive for humanity. These drawbacks will likely remain ongoing obstacles into the foreseeable future.
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smart
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device
. This puts them in touch with an
extremely
large amount of information. Although this trend has
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many
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positive
ramifications, such as
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inter connectivity
between
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people
and the spreading of understanding, it is not without
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drawbacks
. To illustrate this, the effect
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smart
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devices
have on their user’s
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memory
and privacy will be
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analysed
.

For one,
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smart
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devices
have caused
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people
to rely less on their
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memories
.
For example
, sites like Wikipedia
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make
it easy for smartphone users to
quickly
access data on almost any topic. The problem with this convenience is that it encourages
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people
to commit fewer and fewer things to
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memory
, and this
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makes
humanity’s collective understanding of the world
increasingly
dependent on machinery.
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, this is one of the main
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drawbacks
to having unrestricted access to information through
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smart
devices.

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to this,
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reduce
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people’s
privacy, which can lead to unwanted exposure to public scrutiny and ridicule.
For instance
, last year a child in America was
unknowingly
filmed by his classmate while performing an embarrassing dance routine. After the video
was uploaded
to the internet, this child suffered extreme teasing and
ultimately
developed anxiety issues. As this
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shows
, the exchanging of info through
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smart
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devices
is not always a
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positive
thing.

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makes
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, smartphone
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use
can weaken a user’s
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memory
and
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reduce
their privacy, two unfortunate
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drawbacks
to a tool that has
otherwise
been
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very
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positive
for humanity. These
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drawbacks
will likely remain ongoing obstacles into the foreseeable future.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. In your opinion, what is the most important characteristic (for example, honesty, intelligence, a sense of humor) that a person can have to be successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your experience to explain your answer. When you w v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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