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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents's responsibility; while others think, it shoud be the government's duty. What is your opinion? v.1

Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents's responsibility; while others think, it shoud be the government's duty. What is your opinion? v. 1
There are those who think that protecting surroundings is the responsibility of individuals. While some feel that the government has the pivotal duty in this. To me, both points need to come together due to their each importances. On the one hand, it is not undeniable that conserving the neighbourhood is a matter that everyone should concern about. The reason is, the environment is built by its people, if they want it to be clean and tidy, they have to make efforts to protect it; otherwise it will be a mess with the big problems. For instance, in according to a study, India has seen the dirtiest country in the world. It is the result of the lack of residents's awareness about maintaining their neighbourhood. People seem to think that it does not matter to litter because they don't realise the value of the environment. It could be seen that cleanliness of the surroundings depends on individuals' act. Therefore, people need to have an equal responsibility as the government. On the other hand, government plays a significant role in sustaining the environment. As an authority, government could frame suitably policies that influence positively to people's acts in preserving ecosystems. They can create stricter laws to cut down the number of litters, or encourage the factories changing their location from urban areas to rural zones for decreasing the damaged effects of the polluted air, so on. For example, it is not an obvious thing for Singapore to become the cleanest nation in the world. With the severe law of environmental protection of government (fine up to $1000 for smoking in public places, $300 for littering small items in the first time, etc. ). Thus, each citizen compels to do that as a duty and obligation. With regards to environmental issues, I reckon that the duty of government and residents should work hand in hand order to maintain and preserve our Mother nature as much as possible.
There are those who
think
that protecting surroundings is the responsibility of individuals.
While
some
feel that the
government
has the pivotal duty in this. To me, both points need to
come
together due to their each
importances
.

On the one
hand
, it is not undeniable that conserving the
neighbourhood
is a matter that everyone should concern about. The reason is, the environment
is built
by its
people
, if they want it to be clean and tidy, they
have to
make
efforts to protect it;
otherwise
it will be a mess with the
big
problems.
For instance
, in according to a study, India has
seen
the dirtiest country in the world. It is the result of the lack of
residents's
awareness about maintaining their
neighbourhood
.
People
seem to
think
that it does not matter to litter
because
they don't
realise
the value of the environment. It could be
seen
that cleanliness of the surroundings depends on individuals' act.
Therefore
,
people
need to have an equal responsibility as the
government
.

On the other
hand
,
government
plays a significant role in sustaining the environment. As an authority,
government
could frame
suitably
policies that influence
positively
to
people
's acts in preserving ecosystems. They can create stricter laws to
cut
down the number of litters, or encourage the factories changing their location from urban areas to rural zones for decreasing the damaged effects of the polluted air,
so
on.
For example
, it is not an obvious thing for Singapore to become the cleanest nation in the world. With the severe law of environmental protection of
government
(fine up to $1000 for smoking in public places, $300 for littering
small
items in the
first
time, etc.
)
.
Thus
, each citizen compels to do that as a duty and obligation.

With regards to
environmental issues, I reckon that the duty of
government
and residents should work
hand
in
hand
order to maintain and preserve our Mother nature as much as possible.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents's responsibility; while others think, it shoud be the government's duty. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
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