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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.7

Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 7
These days, tourism industry is a worldwide prosperous service. In this regard, there is an opinion that international tourists and foreign visitors should be charged more that local dwellers, when they visit famous tourist attractions and cultural places. On the one hand, extra charging foreign visitors in the museums and galleries can be beneficial for the government budget. Therefore, authorities can spend this investment for the construction of new roads and maintaining city amenities and facilities. To illustrate, the majority of tourist attractions in Paris are built by the money of international tourists. Furthermore, such kind of method can regulate the number of visitors in famous places. It is widely known that many well-known cultural places are often overcrowded by travellers. Consequently, these places can be vandalized by detractors. For example, they can steal historical objects or damage on the walls of museums. On the other hand, it is essential to not extra charge foreign visitors, if the authorities are concentrating on the magnification of the travellers’ number. It is widely accepted that many tourists are not willing to attend the places, which they are charged more strictly than local dwellers. For instance, they can visit other place in order to minimize the risk of being extra charged. Moreover, this method can decrease the level of knowledge of foreign people about the history and culture. That is to say, the lack of knowledge make the situation worse for the government, because they can lose their potential clients in the future. To illustrate, they can visit other countries, instead of visiting this country second time. To conclude, although it seems a good idea to charge foreign travellers more strictly that locals, it can lead to the declination of total number of tourists. However, it is beneficial for the government budget.
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tourists
and
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foreign
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visitors
should
be charged
more that local dwellers, when they visit
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famous
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tourist
attractions and cultural places.

On the one hand, extra charging
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foreign
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visitors
in the museums and galleries can be beneficial for the
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government
budget.
Therefore
, authorities can spend this investment for the construction of new roads and maintaining city amenities and facilities. To illustrate, the majority of
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tourist
attractions in Paris
are built
by the money of international
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tourists
.
Furthermore
, such kind of method can regulate the number of
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visitors
in
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famous
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places
. It is
widely
known that
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many
well-known cultural
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places
are
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often
overcrowded by
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travellers
.
Consequently
, these
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places
can
be vandalized
by detractors.
For example
, they can steal historical objects or damage on the walls of museums.

On the other hand
, it is essential to not extra charge
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foreign
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visitors
, if the authorities are concentrating on the magnification of the
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travellers
’ number. It is
widely
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accepted
that
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many
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tourists
are not willing to attend the
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places
, which they
are charged
more
strictly
than local dwellers.
For instance
, they can visit other
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place
in order to minimize the
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risk
of being extra charged.
Moreover
, this method can decrease the level of knowledge of
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foreign
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people
about the history and culture.
That is
to say, the lack of knowledge
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make
the situation worse for the
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government
,
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because
they can lose their potential clients in the future. To illustrate, they can visit other countries,
instead
of visiting this country second time.

To conclude
, although it seems a
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good
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idea
to charge
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foreign
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travellers
more
strictly
that locals, it can lead to the declination of total number of
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tourists
.
However
, it is beneficial for the
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government
budget.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
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