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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.10

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 10
Penalties applied to criminals are essentially the judges´ responsibility and, therefore, it is thought by many, that the motive and the individual circumstance of a crime should be considered thoroughly by them before making the final sentence. I think, oppositely, that every criminal punishment should be fixed for each different type of crime regardless of their context and in this essay I will explain why. On the one hand, those who support taking into account the circumstances of an individual crime, argue that in this way, more fair punishments can be given. Different motivations may deserve different length of time in jail, for example, assaulting for fun or to make harm must have a larger condemn than a person that assaults to feed his or her children, in which manner could be released and offered to do community work to pay for their mistake instead. On the other hand, many others, consider that punishing in a fixed and strict way makes the community follow the rules. Jail, for instance, is an effective deterrent for people committing a crime. Nobody wants to go to prison, take, for example, in Argentina, since the introduction of fixed punishments, the percentage of crime has been reduced to half because people know what serious consequences have to break the law. In conclusion, whereas many think individual reasons to commit a crime and its social context should be considered to decide the punishment given, I believe fixed and strict penalties must be applied. In this manner, not only the amount of felonies will be reduced, but also the criminals will have the proper and deserved punishment for breaking the laws.
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, that the motive and the individual circumstance of a
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making the final sentence. I
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think
,
oppositely
, that every criminal
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punishment
should be
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fixed
for each
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different
type of
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crime
regardless of their context and in this essay I will
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explain
why.

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crime
, argue that in this way, more
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fair
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punishments
can be
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given
.
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Different
motivations may deserve
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different
length of time in jail,
for example
, assaulting for fun or to
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make
harm
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must
have a larger condemn than a person that assaults to feed
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his or her
children, in which manner could
be released
and offered to do community work to pay for their mistake
instead
.

On the other hand
,
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many
others, consider that punishing in a
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fixed
and strict way
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makes
the community follow the
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rules
. Jail,
for instance
, is an effective deterrent for
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people
committing a
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crime
. Nobody wants to go to prison, take,
for example
, in Argentina, since the introduction of
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fixed
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punishments
, the percentage of
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crime
has been
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reduced
to half
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because
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people
know what serious consequences
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have to
break the law.

In conclusion
, whereas
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many
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think
individual reasons to commit a
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crime
and its social context should
be considered
to decide the
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punishment
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given
, I believe
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fixed
and strict penalties
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must
be applied
. In this manner, not
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only
the amount of felonies will be
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reduced
,
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but
also
the criminals will have the proper and deserved
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punishment
for breaking the laws.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 10

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