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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? -Partially agree. v.3

Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. -Partially agree. v. 3
In many places, local people had to get used to living surrounded by tourists, although both enjoy the same places either natural or cultural value, the tourist must pay more money to access and visit the same attractions. I partially agree with this statement because foreign people should pay the same rates in certain activities. One of the main reasons why I consider that tourists should pay the same rates is because, the more visitor they have, many more possibilities there are to enrich the cultural value of the destination, therefore, having more tourists who appreciate the vast historical value also benefits the country from an economic perspective. For example, museums, cathedral or famous buildings promote the country as a tourist destination and positively affect local markets to be visited by tourists and increase the local economy. In addition, the tourism industry relies on overseas visitors coming to the country to see the main popular places in order to have found for maintenance. For example, Sagrada Familia Cathedral in Barcelona, Spain helps to promote the nation’s cultural heritage, but if travellers realized that they would have to pay extra fees regardless of nationality, they would perhaps not go to that country on holidays or vacations. Instead of raising prices in the entrance, the government should subsidize the maintenance price of the venues in order to increase the number of temporary visitors. On the other hand, global tourism is destroying the environment and cultural identities due to tourist’s irresponsible behaviour. Ecological places are marred because the capacity in destinations exceeds the limit and it affects the natural resources than hardly can be repaired by human efforts. For example, the Peruvian government granted new measures to attempt to limit the tourist number going to Machu Picchu, from July last year visitors are only able to access with an official tour guide. As can be seen, there are multiple alternative options to preserve ecologically resources rather than the limit to increase the price to visit them. I believe that would be counterproductive that tourist pays more than residents. However, new ways to improve responsible tourism need to be implemented in order to preserve the popular attractions without rocket the prices to visit them.
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, local
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to living surrounded by
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tourists
, although both enjoy the same
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places
either natural or
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cultural
value, the
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tourist
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must
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pay
more money to access and visit the same attractions. I
partially
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agree
with this statement
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foreign
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people
should
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pay
the same rates in certain activities.

One of the main reasons why I consider that
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tourists
should
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pay
the same rates is
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because
, the more visitor they have,
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many
more possibilities there are to enrich the
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cultural
value of the destination,
therefore
, having more
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tourists
who appreciate the vast historical value
also
benefits the
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country
from an economic perspective.
For example
, museums, cathedral or
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famous
buildings promote the
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country
as a
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tourist
destination and
positively
affect local markets to
be visited
by
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tourists
and increase the local economy.

In addition
, the tourism industry relies on overseas visitors coming to the
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country
to
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see
the main popular
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places
in order to have found for maintenance.
For example
,
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Sagrada
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Familia
Cathedral in Barcelona, Spain
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helps
to promote the nation’s
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cultural
heritage,
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if
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travellers
realized that they would
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have to
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pay
extra fees regardless of nationality, they would perhaps not go to that
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country
on holidays or vacations.
Instead
of raising
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prices
in the entrance, the
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government
should subsidize the maintenance
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price
of the venues in order to increase the number of temporary visitors.

On the other hand
, global tourism is destroying the environment and
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cultural
identities due to
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tourist’s
irresponsible
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behaviour
. Ecological
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places
are marred
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because
the capacity in destinations exceeds the limit and it affects the natural resources than hardly can
be repaired
by human efforts.
For example
, the Peruvian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
granted new measures to attempt to limit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
number going to Machu Picchu, from July last year visitors are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
able to access with an official tour guide. As can be
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seen
, there are multiple alternative options to preserve
ecologically
resources
rather
than the limit to increase the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
to visit them.

I believe that would be counterproductive that
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tourist
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pays
more than residents.
However
, new ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
responsible tourism need to
be implemented
in order to preserve the popular attractions without rocket the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
to visit them.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. -Partially agree. v. 3

Essay
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