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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.1

Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 1
One of the most controversial issues today relates to many persons believe that the people who decide to discover another country, they should pay the much fees for many of the famous places in it. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view. Firstly, one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of country economic increasing, in my opinion, because the inequalities between countries currency. For example, the riyal of Saudi Arabia not equal to Canadian Dollar. Considerably outweigh its disadvantages. Secondly, the main reason for believing this is that, raising charges are making all of individuals think before destroying elements of this place. Like, when one break any items of the exhibition, he will pay money for administration. Finally, is also possible to say that, visitors places have a huge finance to invest it in development and establishment advertisements for it. For instance Chuk Chese put enormous money in television advertisements. One good illustration of this is an Al-Hokair land, require from citizen little money for input to it while if anyone international student, should pay double fees approximately. On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact we initiate by immigration individuals, they are suffering from changing places, staying in another country as a result of this, they do not sufficient money to adapt of life factors. People often have this opinion because after first cons, families contain more than two members, they need to pay about everyone. A second point is that reducing visitors to this country, due to not create new attractive places. A particularly good example here is Al-Ola winter, if one decided to spend his vacation in it, he thinks much before visit it, all of things too expensive. To sum up, as we have seen, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, however, I tend to believe that, assuming more charged for all a specific time of year. Overall, we perform this principle with determined procedure.
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today
relates to
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many
persons believe that the
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people
who decide to discover another
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country
, they should
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pay
the
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much
fees for
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many
of the
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famous
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places
in it. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view.

Firstly
, one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that the benefits of
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country
economic increasing, in my opinion,
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because
the inequalities between
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countries
currency.
For example
, the riyal of Saudi Arabia not equal to Canadian Dollar.
Considerably
outweigh its disadvantages.
Secondly
, the main reason for believing this is that, raising charges are making
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all of individuals
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think
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before
destroying elements of this
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place
. Like, when one break any items of the exhibition, he will
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pay
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money
for administration.
Finally
, is
also
possible to say that, visitors
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places
have a huge finance to invest it in development and establishment advertisements for it.
For instance
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Chuk
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Chese
put enormous
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money
in television advertisements.

One
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good
illustration of this is an
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Al-Hokair
land, require from citizen
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little
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money
for input to it while if anyone international student, should
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pay
double fees approximately.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to
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make
the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact we initiate by immigration individuals, they are suffering from changing
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places
, staying in another
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country
as a result
of this, they do not sufficient
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money
to adapt of life factors.
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People
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often
have this opinion
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because
after
first
cons, families contain more than two members, they need to
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pay
about everyone.

A second point is that reducing visitors to this
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country
, due to not create new attractive
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places
. A
particularly
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good
example here is Al-Ola winter, if one decided to spend his vacation in it, he
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thinks
much
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before
visit it,
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all of things
too expensive.

To sum up, as we have
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seen
, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that, assuming more charged for all a specific time of year.
Overall
, we perform this principle with determined procedure.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
349 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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