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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.5

Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 5
According to some people, foreigners should pay more than locals to visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. I don’t agree with this view at all. This essay argues that there should be no difference in fees charged to see tourist spots. Arguably, famous places are blasé to people in the same city, but a source of excitement to outsiders. Most people pass the opportunity to go to local famous places, thinking that they’ll do it someday, and so, they never get around to visiting it. The charges to view the monument or museum has nothing to do with this behaviour. In contrast, making it more expensive to outsiders, may deter them from ever venturing in to see the place, which would lead to not having many visitors Some people might propose that a higher fee for non-residents will help in the maintenance of the spot being visited. However, the city or the government is assigned that duty and funds are allocated from an annual budget for the same. Even though this budget is financed by the fee charged, it would be counter productive to hike the fees for foreign visitors and have fewer people coming to the famous site. This essay argued that expatriates should not have to pay more than natives to enter a world-famous venue. It would dissuade them from visiting and then the place would no longer be well-known. In conclusion, all visitors to a tourist spot should be charged the same amount, thus removing all hesitation and advocating others to follow suit.
According to
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some
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, foreigners should pay more than locals to visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. I don’t
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agree
with this view at all. This essay argues that there should be no difference in
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fees
charged to
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see
tourist spots.

Arguably
,
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famous
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places
are blasé to
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people
in the same city,
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but
a source of excitement to outsiders. Most
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people
pass the opportunity to go to local
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famous
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places
, thinking that they’ll do it someday, and
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so
, they never
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get
around to visiting it. The charges to view the monument or museum has nothing to do with this
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behaviour
.
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, making it more expensive to outsiders, may deter them from ever venturing in to
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see
the
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place
, which would lead to not having
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many
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visitors


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Some
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people
might propose that a higher
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fee
for non-residents will
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help
in the maintenance of the spot
being visited
.
However
, the city or the
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government
is assigned
that duty and funds
are allocated
from an annual budget for the same.
Even though
this budget
is financed
by the
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fee
charged, it would be
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
counter productive
to hike the
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fees
for foreign visitors and have fewer
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people
coming to the
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famous
site.

This essay argued that expatriates should not
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have to
pay more than natives to enter a world-
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famous
venue. It would dissuade them from visiting and then the
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place
would no longer be well-known.
In conclusion
, all visitors to a tourist spot should
be charged
the same amount,
thus
removing all hesitation and advocating others to follow suit.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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