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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.15

Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 15
Nowadays, travel is becoming popular among people where they show an interest in exploring other countries' culture and attractive places. While some people claim that the foreigners should pay extra charges to see the historical and culture attractions, others argue they should treated in the same way of local people without an extra charge. I totally disagree with the extra payment that foreigners should pay due to multiple reasons such as equality. This essay will discuss the merits and provide a conclusion with my opinion. To begin with, there are multiple reasons why people believe that foreigners should not pay extra charges. Firstly, tourism is considered as a main source of income for the government in many countries. Therefore, they need to encourage people to visit their country, so they can utilize the profit to develop the country's infrastructure and enhance the economy. For instance, if the tourists lost their interest in visiting the country due to the extra charges, the country economic situation will be badly impacted. Secondly, each country is looking to spread their culture and heritage to the globe. To do this, they need to reduce the cost of the tourist locations, so visitors can afford to visit them and know more about the country's history. Furthermore, if the country increases the fees of the attractive location, visitors will feel that they are treated differently for the local people. Accordingly, they will not feel they are welcome or safe in the country, and this will have a direct impact to the tourism. For example, many tourists are cancelling their trips after discovering they have to pay extra charges and they are not equally treated as local citizens. To sum up, tourism has many advantages for the country which help in developing it and provide a great source of income, either for the government or for the local people due to multiple jobs it creates. However, extra fees that the tourists should pay to visit the attractive locations will reduce the number of visitors, which impact the country and their citizens. I profoundly believe that the government should treat the foreigners in the same way local people are treated and do not expose extra charges to ensure they maintain a great income of the tourism and spread their heritage widely.
Nowadays, travel is becoming popular among
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people
where they
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show
an interest in exploring other countries' culture and attractive places. While
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some
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people
claim that the
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foreigners
should
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pay
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extra
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charges
to
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see
the historical and culture attractions, others argue they should
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treated
in the same way
of
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local
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people
without an
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extra
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charge
. I
totally
disagree with the
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extra
payment that
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foreigners
should
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pay
due to multiple reasons such as equality. This essay will discuss the merits and provide a conclusion with my opinion.

To
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begin
with, there are multiple reasons why
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people
believe that
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foreigners
should not
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pay
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extra
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charges
.
Firstly
,
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tourism
is considered
as a main source of income for the
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government
in
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many
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countries
.
Therefore
, they need to encourage
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people
to visit their
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country
,
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so
they can utilize the profit to develop the country's infrastructure and enhance the economy.
For instance
, if the
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tourists
lost their interest in visiting the
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country
due to the
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extra
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charges
, the
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country
economic situation will be
badly
impacted.
Secondly
, each
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country
is looking to spread their culture and heritage to the globe. To do this, they need to
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reduce
the cost of the
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tourist
locations,
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so
visitors can afford to visit them and know more about the country's history.

Furthermore
, if the
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country
increases the fees of the attractive location, visitors will feel that they are
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treated
differently
for the
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local
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people
.
Accordingly
, they will not feel they are welcome or safe in the
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country
, and this will have a direct impact to the
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tourism
.
For example
,
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many
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tourists
are cancelling their trips after discovering they
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have to
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pay
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extra
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charges and
they are not
equally
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treated
as
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local
citizens.

To sum up,
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tourism
has
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many
advantages for the
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country
which
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help
in developing it and provide a great source of income, either for the
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government
or for the
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local
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people
due to multiple jobs it creates.
However
,
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extra
fees that the
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tourists
should
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pay
to visit the attractive locations will
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reduce
the number of visitors, which impact the
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country
and their citizens. I
profoundly
believe that the
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government
should treat the
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foreigners
in the same way
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local
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people
are
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treated
and do not expose
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extra
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charges
to ensure they maintain a great income of the
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tourism
and spread their heritage
widely
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
382 words
8.5
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