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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.7

It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. v. 7
It is commonly accepted that the internet has brought revolution in the human life, particularly, in the modes of Telecommunication, while some folks claim that it could not be the perfect platform to obtain a data. On the one hand, It is widely deemed that the internet is an outstanding source of communication. As in the earlier times, people cannot instantly talk with their beloved ones. They send their messages through post offices, which was an indirect conversation. Someone, who can afford cell phones, Only those could call their families, but the packages were so expensive, so they can talk seldom. Admittedly, just because of the Internet, nowadays, they can not only talk with each other, but also see each other through video call for different applications by using this technology. For instance, a recent study revealed that humans could not hesitate to migrate from one place and leave their relatives and friends. Because the modern automation stretches the distance and convert the whole world into a Global Village. On the other hand, some schools of thoughts advise that to investigate the information vigilantly, because it may have the faulty websites, which most of the time provide a false data. Furthermore, there is a multitude of sites, where anyone can challenge, edit and publish the articles. And they do not have any system to halt this and only present authentic journals. For example, a student copy the assignment on the history of Austria and he cannot recheck it from any other resource. So, after the submission he received poor grades, because he wrote the history of Australia and there was a mistake in the title. Thus, if you entail an information take it from an authentic resource, because it is not a flawless platform. To conclude, I personally agree that the benefits of the Internet outweigh its drawbacks. Moreover, it has completely transformed the medium of Telecommunication and make it easy and available for any person. However, anyone can secure a correct data, if he uses the authentic place.
It is
commonly
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accepted
that the internet has brought revolution in the human life,
particularly
, in the modes of Telecommunication, while
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some
folks claim that it could not be the perfect platform to obtain a data.

On the one hand, It is
widely
deemed that the internet is an outstanding source of communication. As in the earlier times,
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people
cannot
instantly
talk with their beloved ones. They
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send
their messages through post offices, which was an indirect conversation. Someone, who can afford cell phones,
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Only
those could call their families,
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but
the packages were
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so
expensive,
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so
they can talk seldom.
Admittedly
,
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just
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because
of the Internet, nowadays, they can not
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only
talk with each
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other
,
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but
also
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see
each
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other
through video call for
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different
applications by using this technology.
For instance
, a recent study revealed that humans could not hesitate to migrate from one place and
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leave
their relatives and friends.
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Because
the modern automation stretches the distance and convert the whole world into a Global Village.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
schools of thoughts advise that to investigate the information
vigilantly
,
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because
it may have the faulty websites, which most of the time provide a false data.
Furthermore
, there is a multitude of sites, where anyone can challenge, edit and publish the articles. And they do not have any system to halt this and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
present authentic journals.
For example
, a student copy the assignment on the history of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Austria and
he cannot recheck it from any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
resource.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, after the submission he received poor grades,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
he wrote the history of Australia and there was a mistake in the title.
Thus
, if you entail an information take it from an authentic resource,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is not a flawless platform.

To conclude
, I
personally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that the benefits of the Internet outweigh its drawbacks.
Moreover
, it has completely transformed the medium of Telecommunication and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it easy and available for any person.
However
, anyone can secure a correct data, if he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
the authentic place.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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