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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while some think it is best to deal with them nationally Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while some think it is best to deal with them nationally 1
A section of people holds up a notion that environment related issues should be tackled internationally whilst opponents thinks, it is the responsibility of local community or government and will be handled on the national level. In my opinion, it should be supervised on a global scale because only developed countries can help in an effective way with latest techniques and can provide smooth and natural atmosphere all over the world. Firstly, To clarify the former view, atmosphere related problems such as global warming, ozone layer depletion etc. Should be tackled on international levels because only developed countries could support underdeveloped or developing countries in a superior way with their latest researches and inventions, which is impossible to do with domestic techniques. Moreover, financially strong countries can provide funds to deal with such disasters and maintain stability in the lives of poor nation's people. On the other hand, If people will face difficulties by themselves, which they create by their own with misuse of resources or excessive use of means which damage or harms the environment. Eventually, In such manner they learn to use recyclable resources and avoid harmful to make eco -friendly atmosphere. In my perspective, We should shake hands individually with national government first to contribute their efforts to make a community or nation a better place to live in and then give hands internationally to handle serious environmental issues, in which first of all, people learn how to preserve natural resources than how to cope with other countries to take support to conserve naturalist. To recapitulate it all, I think, it is a matter to contribute individually to make the earth a paradise free from all environmental dangers, then discuss and try to tackle it on the national scale and at last only major hazards should be explained globally to grant aid from them.
A section of
people
holds up a notion that environment related issues should
be tackled
internationally
whilst opponents
thinks
, it is the responsibility of local community or
government
and will
be handled
on the national level. In my opinion, it should
be supervised
on a global scale
because
only
developed
countries
can
help
in an effective way
with
latest
techniques and can provide smooth and natural atmosphere all over the world.

Firstly
, To clarify the former view, atmosphere related problems such as global warming, ozone layer depletion etc. Should
be tackled
on international levels
because
only
developed
countries
could support underdeveloped or developing
countries
in a superior way
with their latest researches and inventions, which is impossible to do with domestic techniques.
Moreover
,
financially
strong
countries
can provide funds to deal with such disasters and maintain stability in the
lives
of poor nation's
people
.

On the other hand
, If
people
will face difficulties by themselves, which they create by their
own
with misuse of resources or excessive
use
of means which damage or harms the environment.
Eventually
, In such manner they learn to
use
recyclable resources and avoid harmful to
make
eco -friendly
atmosphere.

In my perspective, We should shake hands
individually
with national
government
first
to contribute their efforts to
make
a community or nation a better place to
live
in and then give hands
internationally
to handle serious environmental issues, in which
first of all
,
people
learn how to preserve natural resources than how to cope with other
countries
to take support to conserve naturalist.

To recapitulate it all, I
think
, it is a matter to contribute
individually
to
make
the earth a paradise free from all environmental
dangers
, then discuss and try to tackle it on the national scale and at last
only
major hazards should be
explained
globally to grant aid from them.
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while some think it is best to deal with them nationally 1

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307 words
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