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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.14

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 14
Some would argue that problems related to the environment should be tackled on an international level, while others say that it should be handled by the nation facing it. While problems caused by the environment can cause immediate trouble in the country having it, I believe it should be handled internationally as at the end it is affecting the earth. On the one hand, environmental hazards like earthquakes, bush fire and others can destroy the country facing it. It is necessary for the government to develop a plan to save humans and the ecosystem from its hazardous effects. For example, about 1 million people in Bihar were affected by the floods and the Indian government came forward and took adequate steps to save people. However, I believe that this does not solve the actual problem because on the national level government can save lives, but cannot prevent the main cause of the environmental hazard. On the other hand, it is thought that environmental issues should be taken seriously and should be addressed on an international platform. Mankind should be made aware about the harmful effects of the destruction of the ecosystem as each and every human being is equally responsible for global warming which is the main culprit responsible for increase in environmental problems. For example, Greta Thunberg, a young climate activist addressed the world leaders and accounted them responsible for the detrimental effects the climate is facing these days. I believe that this school of thought is preferable because humans are ultimately responsible for the damage to the environment. In conclusion, although nations try to come out of the environmental hazards themselves, it does not treat the actual problem and that is why it is more important to address it on an international level.
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Some
would argue that
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problems
related to the environment should
be tackled
on an international level, while others say that it should
be handled
by the nation facing it. While
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problems
caused by the environment can cause immediate trouble in the country having it, I believe it should
be handled
internationally
as at the
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end
it is affecting the earth.

On the one hand,
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environmental
hazards like earthquakes, bush fire
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and others
can
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destroy
the country facing it. It is necessary for the
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government
to develop a plan to save humans and the ecosystem from its hazardous effects.
For example
, about 1 million
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people
in Bihar were
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affected
by the floods and the Indian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
came forward and took adequate steps to save
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people
.
However
, I believe that this does not solve the actual
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problem
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because
on the national level
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government
can save
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lives
,
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but
cannot
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prevent
the main cause of the
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environmental
hazard.

On the other hand
, it is
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thought
that
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environmental
issues should
be taken
seriously
and should
be addressed
on an international platform. Mankind should
be made
aware about the harmful effects of the destruction of the ecosystem as each and every human being is
equally
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responsible
for global warming which is the main culprit
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responsible
for increase in
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environmental
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problems
.
For example
, Greta Thunberg, a young climate activist addressed the world leaders and accounted them
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responsible
for the detrimental effects the climate is facing these days. I believe that this school of
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thought
is preferable
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because
humans are
ultimately
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responsible
for the damage to the environment.

In conclusion
, although nations try to
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come
out of the
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environmental
hazards themselves, it does not treat the actual
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problem
and
that is
why it is more
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important
to address it on an international level.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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