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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion v.1

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion v. 1
Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions. Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people this century and ocean levels are increasing dramatically. This essay will first suggest that the biggest problem caused by this phenomenon is the flooding of homes and then submit building flood protection as the most viable solution. The foremost problem caused by sea levels creeping up is the flooding of peoples’ residences. Millions of people all over the world live in coastal areas and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they will be inundated with water and lose their property. Shelter is one of the most basic of human needs and widespread flooding would cause millions of people to become homeless, not to mention losing all of their possessions. The devastation brought about by this was clear for all to see during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of people were displaced. A possible solution to this problem would be to build flood barriers. Flood defences, such as dikes, dams and floodgates, could be built along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the water reaching populated areas. The Netherlands is one of the most populated areas in the world and also one of the most vulnerable to flooding and they have successfully employed various flood defence systems. To conclude, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is one of the foremost challenges we face and it will ultimately lead to many of the worlds’ cities being left underwater, but a possible solution could be to utilise the flood prevention techniques already used by countries like Holland. It is predicted that more and more countries will be forced to take such measures to avoid a watery catastrophe. #essay #writing @IELTSc1
Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates.

What
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problems
are associated
with this and what are
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some
possible solutions.

Climate
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change
is among the principal
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dangers
facing
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people
this century and ocean levels are increasing
dramatically
. This essay will
first
suggest that the biggest
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problem
caused by this phenomenon is the
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flooding
of homes and then submit building
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flood
protection as the most viable solution.

The foremost
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problem
caused by sea levels creeping up is the
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flooding
of
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peoples’
residences. Millions of
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people
all over the world
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live
in coastal areas and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they will
be inundated
with water and lose their property. Shelter is one of the most basic of human needs and widespread
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flooding
would cause millions of
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people
to become homeless, not to mention losing all of their possessions. The devastation brought about by this was
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clear
for all to
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see
during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of
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people
were displaced
.

A possible solution to this
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problem
would be to build
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flood
barriers.
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Flood
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defences
, such as dikes, dams and floodgates, could
be built
along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the water reaching populated areas. The Netherlands is one of the most populated areas in the world and
also
one of the most vulnerable to
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flooding and
they have
successfully
employed various
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flood
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defence
systems.

To conclude
, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is one of the foremost challenges we face and it will
ultimately
lead to
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many
of the worlds’ cities being
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left
underwater,
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but
a possible solution could be to
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utilise
the
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flood
prevention techniques already
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used
by countries like Holland. It
is predicted
that more and more countries will
be forced
to take such measures to avoid a watery catastrophe.

#essay #writing

@IELTSc1
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
319 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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