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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.9

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 9
The issue with the environment is constantly at the top of the list of most discussed topics recently. The approach to rectify this problem has also turned into a polarising topic, some argue for the globalist approach, while others prefer it to be handled by individual countries. This essay will discuss the argument for both points of view, but agree that an international collusion will best handle the problem. Several eminent environmentalist argue for all nations to solve the challenges of our environment under one umbrella. Proponents of this idea, always to the uneven distribution of wealth among nations. The fact of the matter is that, not all countries possess the financial muscle to withstand the negative economic impact of instituting environmental policies. For instance, Nigerian foreign exchange is dominated by crude oil export, it is there for apparent that putting restrictions on the use of fuel will be devastating to the economy and stock market. Therefore, it is proposed that economically buoyant nations should ne of assistance to third world countries. However, other relevant professionals subscribe to a more nationalistic approach. Environmental issues are not generalized, in fact, it is different from one country to another. For example, some areas are afflicted with the problem of desert encroachment, while some suffer from rising ocean level that in turn leads to flooding. Therefore, individual nations will diagnose and address problems with their environment efficiently. Despite this, nations still require an international organisation to monitor their commitment and curb any corruption. In conclusion, this essay discussed the benefit of both approaches. In my opinion, there should be cooperation among nations, so that, wealthy nations will be of help to poorer countries.
The issue with the environment is
constantly
at the top of the list of most discussed topics recently. The
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approach
to rectify this problem has
also
turned into a
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polarising
topic,
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some
argue for the globalist
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approach
, while others prefer it to
be handled
by individual
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countries
. This essay will discuss the argument for both points of view,
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but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that an international collusion will best handle the problem.

Several eminent environmentalist argue for all
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nations
to solve the challenges of our environment under one umbrella. Proponents of this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
, always to the uneven distribution of wealth among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
. The fact of the matter is that, not all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
possess the financial muscle to withstand the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
economic impact of instituting environmental policies.
For instance
, Nigerian foreign exchange
is dominated
by crude oil export, it is there for apparent that putting restrictions on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of fuel will be devastating to the economy and stock market.
Therefore
, it
is proposed
that
economically
buoyant
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nations
should
Did you mean "né", "me", or "no"?
ne
of assistance to third world countries.

However
, other relevant professionals subscribe to a more nationalistic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
approach
. Environmental issues are not generalized, in fact, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
from one
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country
to another.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
areas
are afflicted
with the problem of desert encroachment, while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suffer from rising ocean level that in turn leads to flooding.

Therefore
, individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
will diagnose and address problems with their environment
efficiently
. Despite this,
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nations
still
require an international
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organisation
to monitor their commitment and curb any corruption.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed the benefit of both
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approaches
. In my opinion, there should be cooperation among
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nations
,
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so
that, wealthy
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nations
will be of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to poorer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 9

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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