Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 1
It is considered by some that the issues of the environment should be tackled globally, while there are others who think that this matter can be resolved on the national level. In my opinion, I believe that problems of the environment can be solved worldwide but it is more convenient for the nation to take some measures against environmental concern. On the one hand, many think that climate change is the most significant issue that the world is facing today. Being a global issue, policies should be made jointly by the developed and developing countries to keep a check on the amount of pollution contributed by every nation. Without international cooperation and coordination, some states may take advantage to develop their economy at the expense of global climate change. For instance, in 1992, an international treaty named Kyoto protocol was signed by 192 countries in Kyoto, Japan to reduce the global emission of greenhouse gases. On the other hand, the environmental issues can be solved conveniently by the intervention of individuals, organisations and the government of a particular country. The national policymakers can frame best policies by involving industry, indigenous groups, environmental group and community representatives as they are well aware of the quantity of pollution contributed by their locality. This problem can be solved more effortlessly on the lower level as the government of a given nation is knowledgeable regarding the whereabouts of the area and accordingly, measures can be taken to rectify the environmental problem at the local level. A recent survey conducted by the government of India revealed that in the year 2018, 50000 residents from all over the country planted approximately 1 million seedlings to alleviate the air pollution in their surrounding. Finally, in my opinion, whether the issue of climate change is settled at the global level or national, can only be fixed by the rules and regulations enforced by the body at authority. Take, for example, the problem of rising global temperatures should be rectified at both the levels so the related concern could be addressed among the individuals or various nations. In conclusion, the problems of the environment require the appropriate measures for its eradication at international and national levels but the problem can be solved more effectively by the given country.
It
is considered
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
of the environment should
be tackled
globally, while there are others who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that this matter can
be resolved
on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
national
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
level
. In my opinion, I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
of the environment can be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solved
worldwide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it is more convenient for the nation to take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measures against
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
concern.

On the one hand,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
is the most significant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
that the world is facing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
. Being a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
, policies should
be made
jointly
by the developed and developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
on the amount of pollution contributed by every nation. Without international cooperation and coordination,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
states may take advantage to develop their economy at the expense of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.
For instance
, in 1992, an international treaty named Kyoto protocol
was signed
by 192
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
in Kyoto, Japan to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
emission of greenhouse gases.

On the other hand
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
can be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solved
conveniently
by the intervention of individuals,
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.
organisations
and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of a particular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
national
policymakers can frame best policies by involving industry, indigenous groups,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
group and community representatives as they are well aware of the quantity of pollution contributed by their locality. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
can be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solved
more
effortlessly
on the lower
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
level
as the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
nation is knowledgeable regarding the whereabouts of the area and
accordingly
, measures can
be taken
to rectify the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
at the local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
level
. A recent survey conducted by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of India revealed that in the year 2018, 50000 residents from all over the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
planted approximately 1 million seedlings to alleviate the air pollution in their surrounding.

Finally
, in my opinion, whether the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
of climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
is settled
at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
level
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
national
, can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations enforced by the body at authority. Take,
for example
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
of rising
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
temperatures should
be rectified
at both the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
levels
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the related concern could
be addressed
among the individuals or various nations.

In conclusion
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
of the environment require the appropriate measures for its eradication at international and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
national
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
levels
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
can be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solved
more
effectively
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
Learn a language, and you’ll avoid a war.
Arab Proverb

IELTS essay some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
379 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts