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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale, while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.6

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale, while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 6
Environmental problems are the issue of concern and can be solved globally, or a country can take control of its own waste. The approach to solving the environmental problems jointly with other countries could generate more funds and things will work with international standards, while nationally dealing is better if a country has no or less adjoining countries. Solving the issue collective by involving every single country would give effective results. Europe, for instance, made a joint treaty with all the adjoining nations, which helps them to get more solutions to overcome such issues. The small countries share borders and rivers for water so that must be done jointly. The same standards followed would help every single country to maintain cleanliness. The world has several bodies to provide the guidelines to the countries which follow the standards issues with them. As a result, the asynchronous approach will develop which will take care of all the factors, and all countries will be benefitted. A single nation approach is less time consuming to control environmental issues. A nation can control several factors independently, such as a number of factories, diesel vehicles, or plastic waste. A ban could take place and the recommended action would be in the hands of the government only. Several countries in the world are known for their own environmental policies and are at zero tolerance without any help. So, a country can also achieve a level where the environment can be saved. In conclusion, a treaty between several countries helps each other to maintain the environmental standards, which later helps the globe to sustain. A country can go on own, which would save time and attain control over the pollution.
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Environmental
problems are the
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issue
of concern and can
be solved
globally, or a
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country
can take
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control
of its
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own
waste. The approach to solving the
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environmental
problems
jointly
with other
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countries
could generate more funds and things will work with international
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standards
, while
nationally
dealing is better if a
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country
has
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no
or less adjoining countries.

Solving the
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issue
collective by involving every single
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country
would give effective results. Europe,
for instance
, made a joint treaty with all the adjoining nations, which
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helps
them to
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get
more solutions to overcome such
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issues
. The
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small
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countries
share borders and rivers for water
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so
that
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must
be done
jointly
. The same
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standards
followed would
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help
every single
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country
to maintain cleanliness.
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The
world has several bodies to provide the guidelines to the
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countries
which follow the
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standards
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issues
with them.
As a result
, the asynchronous approach will develop which will take care of all the factors, and all
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countries
will be
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benefitted
.

A single nation approach is less
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time consuming
to
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control
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environmental
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issues
. A nation can
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control
several factors
independently
, such as a number of factories, diesel vehicles, or plastic waste.
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A
ban could take place and the recommended action would be in the hands of the
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government
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only
. Several
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countries
in the world
are known
for their
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own
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environmental
policies and are at zero tolerance without any
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help
.
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So
, a
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country
can
also
achieve a level where the environment can
be saved
.

In conclusion
, a treaty between several
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countries
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helps
each other to maintain the
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environmental
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standards
, which later
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helps
the globe to sustain. A
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country
can go on
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own
, which would save time and attain
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control
over the pollution.
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale, while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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