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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree v.31

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 31
Food is the main source for human survival. Nowadays, there is a vast increase in the consumption of junk food in many countries. The advantages overweigh the disadvantages of eating junk food. Therefore, imposing higher taxes on junk food by the government is necessary to some extent. But, there are many more remedies to be taken to reduce having such food. I personally agree with both side and my views are briefly explained in the following passage. On one hand, individual's life became too busy in rush to their work. Therefore, one has no time to have healthy food. In this case, people prefer to have such junk foods available either at restaurants or on the streets called street foods. In these days, modern methods have changed the society with the new technologies. In a way that, one can order food through their mobiles and laptops from the place where they are. Indirectly, this made humans easy to have food and also it saves their time. Irrespective of the food what they are having people just see their comfort. Taking junk food also leads to health issues. Neglecting the age differences people must be thinking about the health problems they may get by eating junk foods. On the other hand, imposing higher taxes by authorities may reduce consumption of junk food to only some extent. However, individual's don't bother about the amount they are spending on food. One is just looking for a tasty and delicious food in order to have healthy food. As days pass on the quality of food is also getting degraded. The young generation now getting addicted to fast foods which spoils one's health. For example, when they go to restaurants they just order various food just to show their status before their friend’s. After having considered all the points that I have mentioned above, we can finally draw a conclusion that I personally think by spreading about the side effects of having junk food may reduce the level of consuming such food.
Food
is the main source for human survival. Nowadays, there is a vast increase in the consumption of
junk
food
in
many
countries. The advantages
overweigh
the disadvantages of eating
junk
food
.
Therefore
, imposing higher taxes on
junk
food
by the
government
is necessary to
some
extent.

But
, there are
many
more remedies to
be taken
to
reduce
having
such
food
. I
personally
agree
with both side and my views are
briefly
explained
in the following passage.

On one hand, individual's life became too busy in rush to their work.
Therefore
, one has no time to have healthy
food
.
In this case
,
people
prefer to have such
junk
foods
available either at restaurants or on the streets called street
foods
. In these days, modern methods have
changed
the society with the new technologies.
In
a way that, one can order
food
through their mobiles and laptops from the place where they are.
Indirectly
, this made humans easy to have
food
and
also
it saves their time. Irrespective of the
food
what they are
having
people
just
see
their comfort. Taking
junk
food
also
leads to health issues. Neglecting the age differences
people
must
be thinking about the health problems they may
get
by eating
junk
foods.

On the other hand
, imposing higher taxes by authorities may
reduce
consumption of
junk
food
to
only
some
extent.
However
,
individual's
don't bother about the amount they are spending on
food
. One is
just
looking for a tasty and delicious
food
in order to have healthy
food
.
As
days pass on the quality of
food
is
also
getting degraded. The young generation
now
getting addicted to
fast
foods
which spoils one's health.
For example
, when they go to restaurants they
just
order various
food
just
to
show
their status
before
their friend’s.

After
having
considered all the points that I have mentioned above, we can
finally
draw a conclusion that I
personally
think
by spreading about the side effects of
having
junk
food
may
reduce
the level of consuming such
food
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 31

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