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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. v. 3
Nowadays, the image has a great influence on communication, especially if compared to the written word, in the past, people used to write down whatever they want, including work and study, and this was why they were affected by the words they saw as well as assigning much time to read. Although, the written word always relates to culture and history, with the discovery of the internet and rapid improvements of technology, all kinds of people are attracted to the visuals. Firstly, starting with students who definitely study using written materials, but they get a better understanding while seeing a diagram, graph or a picture with illustrations on it, secondly the kids who are able to read stories in order to be entertained, but they tend to choose the cartoons or the stories which are full of colourful pictures, and that’s how they get fully attracted. These days, there are such photographic talents, not only they completely grab our attention because of the myriad of nature or the details that photographers capture, but also inspires us to look at the environment around us in a different way. The industry of cinema is exploiting the image concept as well because they suppose that it plays a significant role of conveying the feelings of the actors and producers through a screen. Last but not least, all people get attracted by the use of images easier and faster than they do with written words and I think this mainly depends on the time and how it moves rapidly, so they prefer to understand faster by looking rather than taking some time to read or write
Nowadays, the image has a great influence on communication,
especially
if compared to the
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written
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word
, in the past,
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people
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used
to write down whatever they want, including work and study, and this was why they were
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affected
by the words they
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saw
as well
as assigning much time to read.

Although, the
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written
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word
always relates to culture and history, with the discovery of the internet and rapid improvements of technology, all kinds of
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people
are attracted
to the visuals.
Firstly
, starting with students who definitely study using
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written
materials,
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but
they
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get
a better understanding while seeing a diagram, graph or a picture with illustrations on it,
secondly
the kids who are able to read stories in order to
be entertained
,
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but
they tend to choose the cartoons or the stories which are full of
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colourful
pictures, and that’s how they
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get
fully
attracted.

These days, there are such photographic talents, not
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only
they completely grab our attention
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because
of the myriad of nature or the
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details
that photographers capture,
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but
also
inspires us to look at
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the environment around us
in a
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different
way. The industry of cinema is exploiting the image concept
as well
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because
they suppose that it plays a significant role of conveying the feelings of the actors and producers through a screen.

Last
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but
not least, all
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people
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get
attracted by the
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use
of images easier and faster than they do with
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written
words and I
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think
this
mainly
depends on the time and how it
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moves
rapidly
,
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so
they prefer to understand faster by looking
rather
than taking
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some
time to read or write
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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