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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.17

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 17
In current society, whether environmental issues should be dealt on a global scale or national level, has aroused a debate. Personally, I believe that both are equally important. Compelling arguments can be made that ecological mess must be fixed at national level. To begin with, every country is well familiar with its boundaries. The government of a particular area understands the problems there. It is evident that the administration can interact better with people under their authority. They can be given awareness face to face. Moreover, we know that there are around 200 countries in the world, having different languages and cultures. There is a specific method of campaigning and making people conscious of the environmental hassle in a particular region. In other words, every domain has divergent issues which must be resolved at their definite executive pitch. Admittedly, the other side of the discussion has fewer positives. The reason for this is international organisations can only give instructions instead of implementing the laws in individual countries. Having the example of developed countries, we come to know that they follow rules and regulations strictly as compared to the developing or underdeveloped nations. Even so, there are worldly problems such as global warming, extinction of marine life, etc. , they are the result of ignorance of sole communities. In summary, I would conclude that check and balance worldwide has some pros. Despite that, enactment of laws at domestic level has more advantages. Overall, I am convinced that the point point discussed formerly should be executed.
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current
society, whether environmental issues should
be dealt
on a global scale or national level, has aroused a debate.
Personally
, I believe that both are
equally
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important
.

Compelling arguments can
be made
that ecological mess
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must
be
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fixed
at national level. To
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begin
with, every
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country
is well familiar with its boundaries. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of a particular area understands the problems there. It is evident that the administration can interact better with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
under their authority. They can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
awareness face to face.
Moreover
, we know that there are around 200
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countries
in the world, having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
languages and cultures. There is a specific method of campaigning and making
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
conscious of the environmental hassle in a particular region.
In other words
, every domain has divergent issues which
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must
be resolved
at their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
definite
executive pitch.

Admittedly
, the other side of the discussion has fewer positives.
The reason for this is
international
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organisations
can
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only
give instructions
instead
of implementing the laws in individual
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countries
. Having the example of developed
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countries
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to know that they follow
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rules
and regulations
strictly
as compared to the developing or underdeveloped nations. Even
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so
, there are worldly problems such as global warming, extinction of marine life, etc.
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,
they are the result of ignorance of sole communities.

In summary, I would conclude that
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check
and balance worldwide has
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some
pros. Despite that, enactment of laws at domestic level has more advantages.
Overall
, I
am convinced
that the
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point point
discussed
formerly
should
be executed
.
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Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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