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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. v.10

Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. v. 10
Environmental problems have dramatically increased over the last few years. A rapid increase in population and other problems such as pollution, deforestation, global warming etc. have further exacerbated the situation. Some people argue that these problems are too large to be addressed by an individual being. I believe that it is a mutual responsibility of both individuals and countries to take pragmatic measures for its solution. Overpopulation is one of the pivotal reasons that have detrimental effects on the environment. Increase in population demand more food resources, living space and other basic amenities of life. For instance, for the sake of accommodation many natural parks and forests have been wiped out to fulfil the need for living space. This has lead to severe consequences that could damage both the people and the environment. Individual efforts can contribute a lot to address the pressing environmental problems. Steps taken at an individual level can be an effective solution for the world. For instance, if the government of a country takes initiatives to reduce the rubbish produced daily, can’t do much. However, if the citizens take effort from their personal level, rubbish production could be controlled tremendously. Similarly, if the administration of a country starts planting trees, the effort would not go further without the collaboration of the individuals. Pollution is also a great menace to the environment. It is not only the reason of environmental problems but also has a dire effect on people. Factories operating within cities emit dangerous smoke and other harmful toxins, which are enormously affecting people health and making them more susceptible to diseases. Furthermore, pollution also contributes to global warming. There has been a drastic increase in temperature around the globe, which in turn, melts glaciers across the world. These are no longer national issues and all the governments of the world should work together to address this pressing problem. That is why prudent decisions are required from the government level and the ordinary citizens should be encouraged and participate in every way possible to make the world a better place to live in. To sum up, I would like to say that environmental problems should be addressed on a large scale. Everyone has to contribute in order to mitigate its vulnerable effects on the world. Even a little effort by an individual can make a huge difference.
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Environmental
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problems
have
dramatically
increased over the last few years. A rapid increase in population and other
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problems
such as pollution, deforestation, global warming etc. have
further
exacerbated the situation.
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Some
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people
argue that these
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problems
are too large to
be addressed
by an
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individual
being. I believe that it is a mutual responsibility of both
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individuals
and countries to take pragmatic measures for its solution.

Overpopulation is one of the pivotal reasons that have detrimental effects on the environment. Increase in population demand more food resources, living space and other basic amenities of life.
For instance
, for the sake of accommodation
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many
natural parks and forests have
been wiped
out to fulfil the need for living space. This has lead to severe consequences that could damage both the
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people
and the environment.

Individual
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efforts
can contribute a lot to address the pressing
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environmental
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problems
. Steps taken at an
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individual
level can be an effective solution for the
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world
.
For instance
, if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of a country takes initiatives to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the rubbish produced daily, can’t do much.
However
, if the citizens take
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effort
from their personal level, rubbish production could
be controlled
tremendously
.
Similarly
, if the administration of a country
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starts
planting trees, the
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effort
would not go
further
without the collaboration of the individuals.

Pollution is
also
a great menace to the environment. It is not
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only
the reason of
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environmental
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problems
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but
also
has a dire effect on
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people
. Factories operating within cities emit
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dangerous
smoke and other harmful toxins, which are
enormously
affecting
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people
health and making them more susceptible to diseases.
Furthermore
, pollution
also
contributes to global warming. There has been a drastic increase in temperature around the globe, which in turn, melts glaciers across the
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world
. These are no longer national issues and all the
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governments
of the
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world
should work together to address this pressing
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problem
.
That is
why prudent decisions
are required
from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
level and the ordinary citizens should
be encouraged
and participate in every way possible to
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make
the
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world
a better place to
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live
in.

To sum up, I would like to say that
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environmental
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problems
should
be addressed
on a large scale. Everyone
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has to
contribute in order to mitigate its vulnerable effects on the
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world
. Even a
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little
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effort
by an
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individual
can
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make
a huge difference.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. v. 10

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
391 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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