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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. v. 3
It is irrefutable that environment plays a crucial role in everyone's life. Few citizens hold this idea that the problems regarding surroundings are huge for human beings to elucidate, another section of society think that only government cannot solve the environmental issues without the help of people. In this essay I will discuss both the perceptions and at the end, I will give my view. First of all, no doubt in these days environmental problems is increasing day by day and these are huge for a single person to solve it. This is because of the big amount of plastic is used on products. For example, so many packages of plastic layer use in every single product. Secondly, local people throw their garbage at anywhere. This is due to lack of proper dustbin in every society. Furthermore, the people who think that government cannot control, environmental issues alone unless individuals follow rules and regulations regarding environments. It is the duty of government to make proper rules about these types of issues. Moreover, industry should reduce the package of products and instead of plastic bags they should pack items in paper bags. According to me, it is the duty of both governments as well as every single person. Authority should put a huge amount of fines who break the rules. In addition to this, The Government should add many dustbins in every society so that the garbage should put proper place. And the individuals should also follow the rules and save their environment and should buy the products that have less amount of plastic used. Overall, though the environmental issues are huge, but if both the government as well as individuals does proper care regarding environment we can save it. Every single person should follow the rules and regulations to save our environment.
It is irrefutable that
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environment
plays a crucial role in everyone's life. Few citizens hold this
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idea
that the problems regarding surroundings are
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huge
for human beings to elucidate, another section of society
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think
that
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only
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government
cannot solve the
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environmental
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issues
without the
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help
of
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people
. In this essay I will discuss both the perceptions and at the
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end
, I will give my view.

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First of all
, no doubt in these days
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environmental
problems is increasing day by day and these are
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huge
for a
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single
person to solve it. This is
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because
of the
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big
amount of
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plastic
is
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used
on
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products
.
For example
,
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so
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many
packages of
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plastic
layer
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use
in every
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single
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product
.
Secondly
, local
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people
throw their garbage at anywhere. This is due to lack of
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proper
dustbin in every society.

Furthermore
, the
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people
who
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think
that
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government
cannot control,
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environmental
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issues
alone unless individuals follow
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rules
and regulations regarding
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environments
. It is the duty of
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government
to
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make
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proper
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rules
about these types of
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issues
.
Moreover
, industry should
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reduce
the package of
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products
and
instead
of
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plastic
bags they should pack items in paper bags.

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According to me
, it is the duty of both
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governments
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as well as
every
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single
person. Authority should put a
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huge
amount of fines who break the
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rules
.
In addition
to this, The
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Government
should
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add
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many
dustbins in every society
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so
that the garbage should put
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proper
place. And the individuals should
also
follow the
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rules
and save their
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environment
and should
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buy
the
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products
that have less amount of
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plastic
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used
.

Overall
, though the
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environmental
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issues
are
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huge
,
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but
if both the
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government
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as well as
individuals does
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proper
care regarding
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environment
we can save it. Every
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single
person should follow the
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rules
and regulations to save our
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environment
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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