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Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation? v.5

Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation? v. 5
Newspapers play a vital role in the society because of its influential abilities. It has a huge impact on the thoughts of people in various manners. In my opinion, newspapers can act as a constructive tool if used in a positive and fair manner, but it can also be a lethal weapon for society, if in wrong hands. Starting from the freedom fight of our nation, the newspaper had played a major role in the awakening of common man. As the result of that, our nation got independence. In today's world, newspaper act as the centralized chain to spread about what is happening all around. It enlightens people about the crisis situations which help them to be prepared and take all the preventive actions needed. It also makes the common people aware of the economy of the nation and helps public to know about their elected leaders. On the other hand, a biased news in the newspaper, lead to a negative influence on the reader's mind and can adversely affect the perceptions of the reader. Nowadays, newspapers publish model photographs just to raise their sales. Some of the newspapers are being used by political leaders, in order to create their fake image to get political benefits. As a result of growing competition and commercialization, newspapers can easily break the thin line of an ethical barrier, which can have negative on the society. To sum up, there is a great saying that the pen is more powerful than the sword so newspaper plays an important role in developing the opinion, either positive or negative, in the society.
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play a vital role in the society
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because
of its influential abilities. It has a huge impact on the thoughts of
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people
in various manners. In my opinion,
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newspapers
can act as a constructive tool if
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used
in a
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positive
and
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fair
manner,
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but
it can
also
be a lethal weapon for society, if in
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wrong
hands.

Starting from the freedom fight of our nation, the
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newspaper
had played a major role in the awakening of common
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man
. As the result of that, our nation
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got
independence. In
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today
's world,
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newspaper
act as the centralized chain to spread about what is happening all around. It enlightens
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people
about the crisis situations which
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help
them to
be prepared
and take all the preventive actions needed. It
also
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makes
the common
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people
aware of the economy of the nation and
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helps
public to know about their elected leaders.

On the other hand
,
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a biased news
in the
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, lead to a
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negative
influence on the reader's mind and can
adversely
affect the perceptions of the reader. Nowadays,
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newspapers
publish model photographs
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just
to raise their sales.
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Some of the
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newspapers
are being
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used
by political leaders, in order to create their fake image to
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get
political benefits.
As a result
of growing competition and commercialization,
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newspapers
can
easily
break the thin line of an ethical barrier, which can have
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negative
on the society.

To sum up, there is a great saying that the pen is more powerful than the sword
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so
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newspaper
plays an
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important
role in developing the opinion, either
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positive
or
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negative
, in the society.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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