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Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. v. 4
It is often said that the waste from homes does not achieve the maximum benefit so these views call for restricted laws in using this waste in a better way. To begin with, it is obvious that recycling becomes a must, not a luxury so some courses of action should be taken in order to deal with this topic such as nationwide awareness campaigns and supported rules and laws. Firstly, raise the awareness of people must be put into consideration so as to make them more reactive and more perceptive of the importance of the issue of recycling whereas the recycling development can make a great contribution to the progress of the economy specifically in the developing countries. In this direction, one does his best when he is sensible on all sides of what he is doing so that convincing people with the role of recycling can make a big difference in this field. Secondly, it is undeniable to be seen that some people do not opt for these campaigns that's why setting some rules can regulate and improve this industry by forcing financial punishments on those who are not obligated to these laws. For instance, adding additional taxes on any compound with recyclable waste exceeding 30%, for example, of the total waste. In conclusion, although people who claim that the quantity of recycled waste from homes has some considerable and logical causes. I agree with them, but giving the greatest concern to the awareness of people rather than setting compulsory laws.
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often
said that the
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waste
from homes does not achieve the maximum benefit
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so
these views call for restricted
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laws
in using this
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waste
in a better way.

To
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begin
with, it is obvious that
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recycling
becomes a
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must
, not a luxury
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so
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some
courses of action should
be taken
in order to deal with this topic such as nationwide awareness campaigns and supported
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rules
and
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laws
.
Firstly
, raise the awareness of
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people
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must
be put
into consideration
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so as to
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make
them more reactive and more perceptive of the importance of the issue of
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recycling
whereas the
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recycling
development can
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make
a great contribution to the progress of the economy
specifically
in the
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developing countries
. In this direction, one does his best when he is sensible on all sides of what he is doing
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so
that convincing
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people
with the role of
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recycling
can
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make
a
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big
difference in this field.

Secondly
, it is undeniable to be
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seen
that
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some
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people
do not opt for these campaigns that's why setting
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some
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rules
can regulate and
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improve
this industry by forcing financial punishments on those who are not obligated to these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
.
For instance
, adding additional taxes on any compound with recyclable
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waste
exceeding 30%,
for example
, of the total waste.

In conclusion
, although
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people
who claim that the quantity of recycled
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waste
from homes has
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some
considerable and logical causes. I
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agree
with them,
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but
giving the greatest concern to the awareness of
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people
rather
than setting compulsory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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